I like it a lot. That stuff about dreams is just...wow. unique. And most people don't realize how true fantasy is. There is a powerful being in everyone, something that makes them different. Some people discover it. Others never do.

Sorry, I get a little loopy around 11:00

Can you read the three parts of The Lovesong prophecy for me?

I'll read your stuff if I see your comments.

Danke

Hahaha, like I said, I'm no good with grammars, but it wouldn't hurt to re-check. :)

So would you mind explain the a, b, c, d, thing for me? Hahaha, did I make any sense though?

So it took me a couple times to fully understand the intro, but once I did, I really liked it. Perhaps, different wording would help the readers to understand it clearly quickly :)

I'm no good with grammars but here are what I think in that department. Be sure to correct your typo :) Also be careful with your tenses. You switched between the past and the present. For this writing, I'm not sure if it's mistakes or if it's on purpose (I have the same problems!) though. I'm kinda picky on this next sentence because my eyebrows kinda knitted when I read it, hahaha. "Her talent works only with humans, but I can feel anyone." I also think there are a few missing commas, but don't take my words on it because like I said, I'm no good with grammars :)

So I thought I understood what you mean but then I don't: 

"a, I don't know if it means something is wrong with the way I think, or if fully realizing yourself is unachievable. b, It is possible, after all, to know yourself too well. c, The people who do can't stand themselves anymore. d, They become madmen."

So sentence c and d go together; a and b don't, and b and c seem to work. So is there something missing in b or something not suppose to be in a or I'm just thinking too much and not getting your point? Hahaha.

I'm very concerned about the colors and feelings. Would you be able to put different colors into different moods without duplicates? Other than that, I like it :)

In what prologues I've read, especially short ones, the main character doesn't really come through (because it's more of an overview of the story/short history). I do think my main character gets more depth in the next chapters, however I would love it if you could read them and maybe point out some more of my errors?

About the plot--that actually isn't my plot. She isn't a "powerful being walking among humans." Once she...let's call it "transforms", she lives in a different world than the humans. 

I also don't agree with what you said about the plot having to be really eccentric or interesting in order to be noticed. Many of the worlds bestsellers (especially in fantasy/sci fi) all rely on the same basic underlying plot, however the details and writing differ. I think that the writing is really the clincher in deciding whether or not a book is worth reading. It is for me, at least. 

About the unique writing style: do you mind perhaps giving some examples? And did you mean it as a compliment or a con? 

Huh, you have a very unique writing style and there were no grammatical errors that I could see, but the problem is that there are so many powerful being-walking-among-humans-but-haven't-quite-discovered-their own selves type stories. It would be really hard to get the story really noticed unless the plot was really eccentric or interesting.

Also, you've got to be careful about giving your main character an individual voice. Right now, your main person has no detectable traces of personality or anything. Maybe in your later chapters they have something, but for right now, the best advice I can give you is to give your character some kind of personality flaw, or some little thing that is unnattractive or unappealing to other characters. That might make them easier to relate to and more fun to read about.Good luck.

Well, I'm glad it intrigued you, because that's the point of the prologue ;)

The rest of the chapters are being posted...one and two are already up, if you'd like to read them.

Simon cowell feedback--you asked for it!

This is a pretty good intro! The first 2 paragraphs were great. The whole thing is... well written I think but I'm not entirely sure. I think anything that's "not well written" is actually well written because of the tone you have and the whole thing just seems trippy (in a good way) to me.

that said, the whole thing about colors was kinda cool but kinda cheesy at the same time. Cool because it goes along with the whole trippy dream thing you have going on, cheesy because it's colors... which has been done before but you could make it more your own and it would be great.

I also like how you ended it. I'll be the first one to nod and smile in agreement knowing perfectly well that people who can't stand themselves will, undoubtadly lose thier minds. :)

remind me to read another one of your chapters. It looks pretty interesting.

Very good.

For some reason the opening paragraph seemed a little off to me. It was a little confusing.

Are you saying that people don't dream they die, ever; but that they can dream that they are dying?

What's the difference between dreaming you're dying and dreaming that you die?

Anyway, the rest was really good and I might just be overthinking the first part. The rest of the story sets you up with a lot of questions, that hopefully will be answered later on.

Good job.

I especially liked the part where you said, "After that dream, everything changed. Including all the things that are never supposed to change. Such as gravity’s ability to keep me on the ground."

Very descriptive and original.