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*Satan's messenger*

November 17, 2009
By SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
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SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
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"Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets."

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Theres a man sitting on a park bench dark
hair black to the sight. powdery blue eyes.
His outfit consists of a long dark trench
and black jeans onix boots and a red dress
shirt . He looked like the angel of death..
Little did she know he was very close.

Erin hardly ever peered over her book pages
to look upon the outside world. Her mind was
too busy thinking of her knight in shining armor
What she wished from her dreams.~ She trips~

Jasons gaze shifted from the concrete to the
thin girl whom fell upon the roughed ground
after her foot had caught on his. He helped her
up.

"hello miss you should be more careful"

Erin struggled to her feet " I know i just
get so caught up in the novel.." she stopped
Once she noticed how handsome the boy
was.

"oh my" she said. he smirked.

"if your going to say god im far from that"
she smiled and shook her head.

" i dont believe in only one god"

"you should he's out there..

© Jill P., Hillland Village, TX

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PJD17 SILVER said...
on Mar. 25 2011 at 7:14 pm
PJD17 SILVER, Belleville, Illinois
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I do the best imatation of myself- Ben Folds

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very good writing and a very interesting story  i thought that the dialogue was very good and very clever  i'd like to read more of your work  keep writing   could you please take a look at and comment on my story Manso's shame  i'm writing a novel length story featuring the same character so i'm really looking for feedback on that story 
We-R-3 BRONZE said...
on May. 4 2010 at 8:16 pm
We-R-3 BRONZE, Orlando, Florida
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A picture is worth a thousand words, however it takes a real artist to turn words into pictures.<br /> <br /> Have you heard about the new Lebron Iphone, you have to set it on vibrate because it doesn&#039;t have any rings

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Very interesting plot the dialouge kind of started abruptly and there are captilization errors but I see a very good story in this.
SageSin GOLD said...
on Apr. 15 2010 at 11:55 am
SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets.&quot;

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IDk i asm not shure if i should write more lol  what do you think?

///,..,^ FANG SAYS: hes unsure!!!

SageSin GOLD said...
on Apr. 15 2010 at 11:54 am
SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 63 comments

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&quot;Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets.&quot;

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ahhh puncituaiona dn spealling never was good at that XD Dont worry about it ur a cool person and thanks for the help maybe you should edit my work ^_^

////,..,^ FANG SAYS: BOO!

burningembers GOLD said...
on Apr. 13 2010 at 7:16 pm
burningembers GOLD, Union City, Ohio
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Nothing big, just things like "i dont"  which should be "I don't."  I think I'm being nitpicky, but it just makes for easier reading.  Keep up the great work!
SageSin GOLD said...
on Apr. 13 2010 at 9:28 am
SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets.&quot;

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thanks for commenting one and what kind of editing? I love feedback! Thanks aslo for telling me to continue to write!!!!!!
burningembers GOLD said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 7:47 pm
burningembers GOLD, Union City, Ohio
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I love the plot, with a little editing it would be perfect.  : )  Keep writing!
SageSin GOLD said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 9:38 am
SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets.&quot;

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I may but no one has said much about this one so idk and where to take it well fang has an idea ////,...,^ TO H***! XD
Venus_Queen said...
on Apr. 11 2010 at 10:04 am
This is really good! are you writing more?
AlyssaFama SILVER said...
on Apr. 7 2010 at 2:27 pm
AlyssaFama SILVER, Kunkletown, Pennsylvania
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Most people want to be the sun that brightens your day. I&#039;d rather be the moon that shines down on you in your darkest hour.

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haha your welcome fangs!
SageSin GOLD said...
on Apr. 7 2010 at 10:54 am
SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets.&quot;

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Thanks! lol I can't believe you favorited! ////,...,^FANG SAYS:THANK YOU CITYLIGHTSGIRL93!
SageSin GOLD said...
on Apr. 7 2010 at 10:52 am
SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets.&quot;

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hmmmm well then ///,...,^ FANG SAYS HI!
AlyssaFama SILVER said...
on Apr. 6 2010 at 6:32 pm
AlyssaFama SILVER, Kunkletown, Pennsylvania
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Most people want to be the sun that brightens your day. I&#039;d rather be the moon that shines down on you in your darkest hour.

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This was sooo goood!! I really honor the fact that you weren't afraid to write about something that so many other people are afraid to express their opinion on! *Favorites!!*
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 6 2010 at 3:22 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
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There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Haha... don't think so... :
SageSin GOLD said...
on Apr. 6 2010 at 9:33 am
SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets.&quot;

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Thanks for commenting! and I know it can be a touchy subject so i reeeelllleee hope no one gets angry with me ^_^
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 5 2010 at 12:20 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
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Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Love the topic! 999,999.9 STARS!!!!!!!!!