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Broken Butterflies

May 29, 2012
By WynterPage95 ELITE, Monticello, Arkansas
WynterPage95 ELITE, Monticello, Arkansas
164 articles 8 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to burn out than to fade away..." -Kurt Cobain


Summary:

Wynter Tomson suffers from Lupus SLE, an autoimmune disease that breaks her apart and makes her more fragile than anything. She hates herself and hardly anyone knows of her disease.
Only when a foreign exchange student comes to her school does she start to look at herself in a different light.
But sometimes, too much change leads to dangerous actions. And Wynter tries to change too much, too fast, and in the wrong way.


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on Sep. 23 2014 at 12:07 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is absolutely, amazing. I hope you continue it, but if not, that's fine. It's just your story is amazing. It's wonderful. It has so much emotion and it's full of you and the people you care for. It's wonderful. I hope you continue, because you have such a talent and I enjoyed reading it. You do have a talent and greatness in you; bealieve that, please. Thank you for sharing this, so much. 

on Apr. 22 2014 at 9:09 am
albaschirinzi BRONZE, Tirana, Other
4 articles 0 photos 9 comments
In my opinion, this story is a masterpiece! I really enjoyed it and the knowledge you have about the disease and the fact that the story is also very personal to you makes it more meaningful and realistic. Keep up the good work!

on May. 5 2013 at 10:00 pm
Ms.PeytonLovesHP GOLD, Rancho Cordova, California
18 articles 0 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
“We are all a little weird and life is a little weird, and when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we join up with them and fall in mutual weirdness and call it love.” - Doctor Seuss

Hmmmm...... it's really good. However, here's a few pointers: Maybe slow the pace down a little bit with Zane, it's going too fast to be believable. Work on grammar and punctuation a bit, but it's not that bad. And last of all: CONTINUE IT! It's really good! I want more. :)

on May. 5 2013 at 6:22 am
FallenAngel170198 GOLD, Bundaberg, Other
13 articles 0 photos 47 comments
You should write some more :3 it's amazing :D

nanamay said...
on Mar. 22 2013 at 3:04 pm
nanamay, Alvin, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
love the person hate the sin

so cool wright more.......it is peaceful...... :P

on Jun. 28 2012 at 6:51 pm
KJAngelAuthor SILVER, Holland, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
With understanding comes wisdom.

I agree with "nemish23"!!! You sound so knowledgeable about Lupis and it has a very personal feel to it. Please continue writing it!!!

on May. 31 2012 at 5:41 pm
nemish23 BRONZE, Sydney, Other
2 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The happiest people don&#039;t necessarily have the best of everything;<br /> They just make the most of everything they have.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Today is life. The only life we&#039;re sure of. Make the most of today.&quot; -CSI:NY

This is a great start to a really good sounding story. I'd love to read more.

I love it when people write books that mean something to them because it brings so much meaning to a story so good job!