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April 29, 2009
By *LunaNight* GOLD, Staten Island, New York
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You made my heart bleed






And my eyes cry





My mind weak
This shouldn’t be how we say goodbye
My body trembling
Emotions- a wreck
You hurt me real deep
And made me bleed inside
For now my heart is broken
And all I can do is cry
Why did you hurt me?
Did I do something wrong?
I’m confused and angry
Like an emotional love song
I feel numb inside
As if I’m about to die
My surroundings a blur
I’m starting to hurl
Look what you’ve done to me!
I cant think about the future
Cant think about the past
Only about what you did to me
How can I possibly last?
What goes around
Comes around
I heard the Justin Timberlake song
Its all your fault really
You did it all wrong
I hope you regret it
And miss me real bad
Because now I am angry
And really, really sad
I will always remember you
And remember how you made me cry
But for now, I thank you
For you helped me out of being blind
I can see again
And see all the things you did to me
I can see the good too
Highly doubt if you remember
You see?
I didn’t do anything wrong
don’t know why I would blame me?
For it was all of your wrong doings
And there is no more “we”
Just you and
me

© Caroline B., Haworth, NJ

The author's comments:
Even though i havent experienced love yet, ive heard enough songs, saw enough movies, and DEFINATLY read enough books to know how it feels like to get your heart broken.
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RainWashed PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 20 2010 at 3:47 pm
RainWashed PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
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"Repeat the good and the bad. Do it all again. And pile on the years."

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This was the best poem i have ever read. it was sooo good and i will recommend it to everyone i meet. This was very very good. You have to keep writing because it would be a real shame for you not ot share youre natural talent with the world. :)
TheHandThatWieldsThePen SILVER said...
on Jul. 25 2009 at 2:26 pm
TheHandThatWieldsThePen SILVER, Shapleigh, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Let&#039;s waste time<br /> chasing cars<br /> around our heads.&quot;<br /> --Chasing Cars by Snow Patrol<br /> <br /> &quot;I do believe it&#039;s true<br /> there are roads left in both of our shoes<br /> if the silence take you then I hope it takes me too.&quot;<br /> --Soul Meets Body by Death Cab For Cutie

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i may be wrong, but I am pretty sure His-Bright-Green-Eyes is sallyloco. I was wondering the same thing, because I loved her work too.

By the way, awesome poem. The words you used to describe the emotions you are portraying really made the poem.
*LunaNight* GOLD said...
on Jul. 2 2009 at 9:30 pm
*LunaNight* GOLD, Staten Island, New York
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sallyloco, or who knows her, please write a comment back, because it seems that i cant get to your profile page. i dont know if its a glitch in my computer, or you cancled ur account. please, if its the second, get bk ur account. if u are mad that ppl wont comment, just be patient. i had to wait months for my first comment, and it darn near made me insane!!! please come back, because i LOVED your writing, and i would miss it if u left teenink. and if u know sallyloco, please pass this meesage along to her. thank u...
brand*new*eyes SILVER said...
on Jun. 28 2009 at 8:29 pm
brand*new*eyes SILVER, Saint Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Misguided ghosts<br /> Traveling endlessly<br /> The ones we trusted the most<br /> Pushed us far away<br /> (paramore)

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i loved how you used the right words to make the emotions so strong. I also love how the reader can relate to the poem, and the emotions. I love your work, keep writting!
amyxu said...
on Jun. 27 2009 at 5:20 pm
Wow, I love this! The inner rhymes are amazing. Um, one suggestion: maybe instead of saying "the" Justin Timberlake song, you could say "our" Justin Timberlake song (or at least I think that's what you mean by putting it in there--if not, then never mind). Good job, your poem is great!
*LunaNight* GOLD said...
on Jun. 25 2009 at 7:59 pm
*LunaNight* GOLD, Staten Island, New York
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thank u all so much for commenting. it truly means so much to me that i can get a big part of me out there, and have people appreciate what i love to do, and vice versa. thankk you.
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND said...
on Jun. 23 2009 at 2:52 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
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Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

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Bridie is right! I was glad i found it too! It was awesome! I loved it!
Inkspired PLATINUM said...
on May. 15 2009 at 11:19 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?&quot; - Mario Pei<br /> &quot;I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn&#039;t, I would die.&quot; Isaac Asimov

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AMAZING!! I love this poem, it's amazing for someone who's never had their heart broken, sounds like it actually happened to you! You got the feeling just right!
taradise said...
on May. 7 2009 at 4:46 pm
Although you hav'nt experienced alot of the emotions you write about, you still seem to capture the it. Perfectly... I look foward to following your career.. i know there is lots more to come.
Bridie ELITE said...
on May. 7 2009 at 2:29 am
Bridie ELITE, Massapequa, New York
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Favorite Quote:
She can because she thinks she can.

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Holly crud! I am so glad I found your poem! it is beautiful, and I feel that I just went and still am going through this right now!And yes you described it appsalutly perfectly and I applaud you on that talent. keep writing you are amazing!