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Death's Eyes

March 11, 2010
By CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
16 articles 2 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle


Staring into his eyes,
Almost completely black,
Hearing my hearts cries,
Waiting for the attack.

Almost completely black,
Around us is the night,
Waiting for the attack,
The one I would not fight.

Around us is the night,
Watching the beautiful creature,
The one I would not fight,
He owns not one ugly feature.

Watching the beautiful creature,
He leans in for a kiss,
He owns not one ugly feature,
For this I will miss.

He leans in for a kiss,
Hearing my hearts cries,
For this I will miss,
Staring into his eyes.


The author's comments:
This type of poem is called a pantoum...and yes it's about a vampire.

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on Jul. 25 2010 at 8:13 am
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
\&quot;either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin<br /> <br /> \&quot;If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\&quot; <br /> <br /> \&quot;If music be the food of love, play on.\&quot;

wow i love your writing style!!! its so unique and interesting!!! i really love the effect of this poem-its sort of mysterious and cold but still so awesome!!! plus you picked the perfect pic. to go w/ it!! please check out some of my work it would mean a lot. I think that you might like 'stay for tomorrow' and 'words unspoken'. it would mean a lot if you would ckeck out my work!!:)

on Jun. 8 2010 at 6:37 pm
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
16 articles 2 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words.&quot; -Aristotle

Thank you so much!

REMi93 GOLD said...
on Jun. 7 2010 at 11:20 pm
REMi93 GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love Never Fails

I love this poem. It's cool how you repeat lines but it doesn't feel like repetition at all. It has a beautiful flow and serene power.

on Jun. 2 2010 at 9:56 pm
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
16 articles 2 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words.&quot; -Aristotle

Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it!

on May. 25 2010 at 1:03 pm
chastity SILVER, Beckley, West Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
take me as i am or take me as i leave

wow this is so great!!! i wish i were ths good