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Adieu to Summer
December 24, 2010
The wind is blowing cooler than before
The sun is beginning to fade today
And hearts of children playing melt away
The Seasons switch from left to right quickly
And saddening days come when snow blows down
A terrible sight to see white blankets
As they do cover the whole troubled town
They snuff and sneer as shovels come to work
They pile snow onto the lawns and scowl
The cars get stuck and people shovel out
The snow came late so children are in school
No playing here; they have to stay and learn
A scream is not in sight; laughter has gone
No marks are left from sleds or boots in town
Alls quiet till’ the time of day has come
The bell will ring and children laugh and run
The fun is finally here for today
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This article has 22 comments.
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 6 2011 at 11:22 pm
I'm glad you liked it! :)
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 4 2011 at 11:47 pm
i don't think so... I wrote it to be free verse it just happens to rhyme in a few spots!! :)
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 4 2011 at 11:46 pm
Thanks!! :)
OriginalCarbonation said...
on Jan. 3 2011 at 12:11 am
very good word choice throughout. this creates a very good image in my head. good!
stubborn411 GOLD said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 10:41 pm
This piece is very detailed. I like the way you explained the seasons as they switch from Summer to Winter. Very pretty
Brother12 said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 3:20 pm
Pretty Good! Is this a haiku or some type of special writing type of poem??? It really flows in the beginning!! At the end it gets a little choppy, but is pretty good! I enjoyed reading this!!
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 2:43 am
Thanks! And Colorado was what inspired me to write this! :):)
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 2:42 am
Thanks and i like that i'll think about changing the ending to make it flow more! I appreciate you commenting and helping me to improve my writing! :):)
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 2:40 am
Thanks for the ideas! I wasn't even trying to rhyme, but i guess i happened to rhyme most of it :):)
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 2:38 am
THANKS! That's a good point! I'll need to go back and revise it a little! :) :)
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 2:37 am
Thanks! And i was happy to here that you saved it as a favorite!! :):)
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 2:36 am
Thanks! I appreciate the positive comment! :) :)
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 31 2010 at 1:44 pm
Thankyou everyone for the comments! It has really helped me to know what I need to improve on in my writing!! :) :)
Got_Interest GOLD said...
on Dec. 31 2010 at 11:25 am
Very good. I like your use of Imagery here. I can picture the school, the town, and the children
sunnyhunny PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 31 2010 at 9:26 am
I really like this! It tells a story that many of us experience in our own ways each year. I would work on trying to make it flow a little better, though. I noticed that initially you tried to make it rhyme, but then you kind of stopped. I think it sounded best when it was rhymimg. Also, Maybe try having each verse be the same amount of lines. Just some ideas, really nice job.
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