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September 5, 2013
By elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Why that fighting and war,
Why that killing, what for?
In greater cause,
Because of greater deed,
Or just feeding your ego,
Fulfilling your need?
Do you ever think of just one,
Only one sad face,
Empty street, empty heart,
You leave behind?
Are you aware of the trace,
All the emptiness,
Sad people, lost days,
Nothing more, nothing less?
No empathy,
Or valid values,
Feeling for the others,
Just doing things regardless;
Would awareness;
If you even noticed,
Would it make a difference?
Would less pretending,
Bring a happy ending?
Would you even bother,
Would you even change,
Try to help one another,
Before valid values have gone estranged?

© Jillian K., New City, NY

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AnnaSharudenko BRONZE said...
on Dec. 26 2015 at 8:40 pm
AnnaSharudenko BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality. -Edgar Allan Poe

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So inspiring. The lines were just flowing in my brain.
sameenmaali said...
on Oct. 23 2014 at 11:32 pm
sameenmaali, San Diego, California
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amazing job!
StarGazer9 GOLD said...
on Sep. 15 2014 at 12:13 pm
StarGazer9 GOLD, Marana, Arizona
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&quot;Never let the odds keep you from doing what you know in your heart you were meant to do.&quot;

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Hey there! I have to say I loved it, you put these thoughts beautifully on paper. Oh, and congratz on making it in the magazine ;)
Ariel_Fluffyy SILVER said...
on Sep. 12 2014 at 9:27 pm
Ariel_Fluffyy SILVER, Los Angeles, California
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&quot;You May Encounter Many Defeats But You Must Not Be Defeated&quot; By- Dr. Maya Angelou

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OMG!!!! This made me cry! it is so good!
elycavill SILVER said...
on Jul. 11 2014 at 4:01 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Thank you!    
elycavill SILVER said...
on Jul. 11 2014 at 4:01 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Thanks!      
BestWritingByBrit GOLD said...
on Jul. 6 2014 at 1:15 pm
BestWritingByBrit GOLD, Livingston, New Jersey
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&quot;Hard work beats talent when talent fails to work hard.&quot;

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I loved this so much!
jolo said...
on Jul. 3 2014 at 8:51 am
very good , i like this poem much   
Luv4Ever SILVER said...
on Jul. 2 2014 at 4:59 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
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A miracle is just another name for hard work<br /> -Minho in &quot;To The Beautiful You&quot;

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I like the uneven meter you applied to this piece, it applies the emotion quite nicely. All around great job
elycavill SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2013 at 8:46 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Dutchman thank you a lot, your words heal so I believe your deeds and career also will;)
elycavill SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2013 at 8:45 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Thank you really much on congrats, and positive review, I am glad to see a complimet coming from you ( since I've read many of your writings and really loved it). :D
elycavill SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2013 at 8:43 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Well thanks, it is not a problem you just need to unify it with  the thought and it will make a rythm flow :D
elycavill SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2013 at 8:42 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Thank you for your constructive comment, and I am glad there are so many components you liked! :D
elycavill SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2013 at 8:41 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Thanks on positive thoughts of it!:)
elycavill SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2013 at 8:40 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Milip thank you for your deep thoughts of my peom.
elycavill SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2013 at 8:40 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

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Leave nothing but footprints,<br /> Take nothing but pictures,<br /> Kill nothing but time.

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Thank you very much! :)
Mckay ELITE said...
on Oct. 1 2013 at 4:38 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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Excellent use of rhetorical questions. The emotion that use begs the reader to understand...just for one second. This poem is appropriately titled. It brings awareness to the reader. Congrats on the Editors' choice. 5/5 stars from your truly. 
Literature_Darling GOLD said...
on Sep. 29 2013 at 9:07 pm
Literature_Darling GOLD, Warrenton, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;To live is the rarest thing of all. Most people exsist and that is all.&quot; ~Oscar Wilde<br /> &quot;I am a writer quite by accident, the way one my fall and rip a hole in their jeans.&quot; ~Blogger H. B. Sachs

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I loved the rhyming! (rhymes in poetry are something I have never been well at so I always find it facinating when other people accomplish it so beautifully)
BlackbeltJames GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2013 at 5:41 pm
BlackbeltJames GOLD, Reading, Other
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Isaac Asimov - &quot;Intelligence is an accident of evolution, and not necessarily an advantage.&rdquo;

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The tempo and rhythm of the poem/song was very good and it kept it going all the way through, it was very fluent and not many can pull that off; it suited the fast pace desperation of the poem, as if it was begging the reader - it made it a lot more effective and powerful. There was a strong, almost emotional, bond between the reader and the poem, it allows the reader to connect. This is well written with good use of language and the rhetorical questions as it makes the reader think more. Well Done :)
The Flying Dutchman said...
on Sep. 17 2013 at 2:40 pm
Wow!!! Really beautiful poem! I like everything about it: the style, the message and the questions. Keep writing ;)