idk wat the charleston is but i like the poem

bro it is only a bad poem if you make it one. I like it. It does need work and you know what that poem of mine that you read "stupid society" I had rewriten 15 times. Keep working on it. The thing is if you want to be a song writer you have to hold the Idea keep writing don't lose your site on the page keep a look out for beats and rythems let it flow like a good techno song or a good rock tune. don't go fancy I did simple and easy language everyone knows. I only gave it a natural rytheme and beat it comes out only one way. That is the secret just let it flow. This poem has potentional don't give up on it you say its bad make it better. This is only advice you want more advice on song writing I can tell you email me at nsk92@yahoo.com that way you can learn how to let it flow. It is easy once you get the hang of it. love each and every poem and don't give up on that dream of that poem give it a life give it a pation give it every thing love and nurture the poem or song like a baby. and no Im not a perfetional song writer Im just a dude that cared for a poem and worked at it.

Hi Mikal! I actually really like this poem. I do, however, agree with EdytD. It could be much improved if you took the everyday words, such as 'nice' or 'joy' and dug up the ol' thesaurus and got creative.

Also, I believe you meant 'feel' not 'fell' :)

hey, it's not that bad, honestly! It could be a great poem; what I would do is take the vague comments such as a "nice melody" and instead give more concrete imagery like you do in your poem about life - tell something that the readers will be able to relate to. Also, just on a grammatical note - were ever is spelled wherever. ;)

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This is my worst poem! Pleases check out my other poems! They are better!

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