This has a lot better flow than your Here Comes the Rain poem. I also feel more connected to the characters emotions. Overall I think this is a very strong poem, but I do have a few pointers.

In the first line of your second stanza you say "She had him before I" ... I is supposed to be me in this case, because its the object of the preposition. Also, you have some commas in between lines where you shouldn't. I love where you seperated your sentences for the flow of the poem, but you didn't need to put commas in a lot of the places you did. It makes the reader stop in the flow of their reading and makes it more confusing.

Really just some minor grammatical errors. Just work on those and this poem really will be great.