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LOST FIRST LOVE

May 27, 2011
By poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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When I came out on the moon....
I never thought that I would win a heart.
You see the human far away....
From all the changing shapes.

But when I saw, and when I stayed,
Through all the changing colors.
I though all the happy days,
Would pass between.

I, crazed at a sight,
Struck friend and foe to the ground.
And when returned to me,
I saw a love of hate.

When I restored came out to greet,
The pretty face I missed.
It appeared to change, and gaze and look,
Away, far off from me.

I saw the burning light grow dim,
And anguish turning to hate.
I saw the twinkle of an eye,
And tears that gave me pain.

I saw a rose of purple pink,
Rushing in the light of day.
But never did I see the ones,
I miss now to this day.

© Sophia E., Wilmington, DE

The author's comments:
This was inspired by a feeling I had. Though, I exaggerated to make a more dramatic scene.
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Helena_Noel BRONZE said...
on Jan. 22 2012 at 9:34 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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&ldquo;I&#039;d rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I&#039;d rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye&#039;s a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example&#039;s always clear.&rdquo; -Edgar Guest

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I can't help but agree with megsloveslions, the imagry in this poem is beyond amazing! I don't know why more people don't have imagry like this in their works, lack of talet? of creativity? I don't know, but you certainly did an awesome job. I love it out loud!
megsloveslions GOLD said...
on Dec. 6 2011 at 5:27 pm
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Love the poem, love the imagery,  great work!
sophza PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 12:04 am
sophza PLATINUM, Sacramento, California
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"When I came out on the moon...." could mean that you are in a new, unfamiliar, and kind of beautifully alien place. It made sense to me. By the way, awesome job!
poetic.eyes PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 8:22 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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totally, with all the strange names I don't even pay atantion to them really!!!!!
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on Nov. 29 2011 at 8:09 pm
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Haha its okay! It's kinda hard to keep everyone straight on here. Lol
poetic.eyes PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 8:05 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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oh gosh i'm so sorry I totaly screwed up there. I thought you were someone els for a moment there!!! oh I'm embarised please forgive me!!!!!! Ah!
poetic.eyes PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 8:03 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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okay, thanks so much, I just looked at backwards mirrors and absolutetly loved it, but I'll look at the one you sujest here!
LifesIllusion BRONZE said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 7:58 pm
LifesIllusion BRONZE, Cicero, Indiana
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AMAZING imagery. I can't get over how good this poem is:) Obviously if you can write with this good of attention to detail you are a skilled writer. Now will you check out my piece Beginning of the End? Thanks. Comment back:)
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on Nov. 26 2011 at 9:59 pm
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Wow! This is really good! I love the abstract ideas within it!(:
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Excellent job with great imagery. Loved the poem great job. This poem also has a feeling of wonderment for some reason.
austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 26 2011 at 8:51 pm
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I really like this poem - I especially like your use of imagery and how it affects the overall message!
ams98 said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 6:57 pm
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That is really great....good job:) I really enjoyed it:)
kat2.0 SILVER said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 12:10 pm
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Your an incredible writer and this poem is outstanding
RFrocker23 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 11:39 pm
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You have a really beautiful way of writing. It's abstract but has this really clear message beneath it. Keep it up.
poetic.eyes PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 1:44 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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thanks a lot!!!! Personally this is one of my favorite poems I've written in a long time! :) ;) i really like your stuff!!!
emanmkhan SILVER said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 7:24 am
emanmkhan SILVER, Austin, Texas
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You had me hooked to this!
poetic.eyes PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 9:56 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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yeah, I don't really understand the first line ether. It was just the way I discribed my feeling.
NinjaGirl BRONZE said...
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I don't really understand the first line... and keep in mind for future reference that you don't need punctuation at the end of every line. Other than that it's great. :)
poetic.eyes PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 28 2011 at 7:03 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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Well thank you! I sometimes have these strange out bursts of feelings which come through poetry!
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on Jun. 28 2011 at 8:54 am
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Oh my goodness! 12 stars out of 5! Really nice job!