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August 17, 2011
By molonlabe SILVER, Ellicott City, Maryland
molonlabe SILVER, Ellicott City, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
Be the person your dog thinks you are


It is a Sunday night, raining, and I am eating oatmeal
There is a language to be learned, a list to dominate

And I can't hear what's being said upstairs, but I can
Make out my mother's butterscotch laughter, my
Father's heavy-lidded footsteps, the sound of the
Icemaker and the rain. These are the things that

Make a childhood. Yet there is a butterfly effect to
This life. A waltz that you can't see, but you feel the
Big band strike up the music in your blood. Why
Are people always leaving? Spun round and round

In overlapping rotations. If only in this world
That is mostly linoleum and revolving doors
Things could be as familiar as my childhood staircase
As familiar as rainy Sunday nights and oatmeal


The author's comments:
A poem about growing up and the mundane details of daily life that deserve recognition.

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Lexie96 GOLD said...
on Oct. 27 2011 at 6:57 pm
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

I like the simplicity of it because it is also mixed with a certain depth which makes it very interesting to read. Great work, check mine out sometime? Please?

on Aug. 20 2011 at 9:11 pm
snaomi PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
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I like the way each line moves into the next so effortlessly - the way it ends without punctuation helps propel it forward and makes me think about it after I'm finished reading the actual words.  Nice :)

jessb BRONZE said...
on Aug. 19 2011 at 3:22 pm
jessb BRONZE, Schaumburg, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Snoopy: Dear, I miss you more each day. I love you more than words can say.
Charlie Brown: That's nice, but who are you writing to?
Snoopy: I can always fill that in later.

Great imagery and structure! This poem successfully explores the significance of a simple moment.

on Aug. 18 2011 at 8:01 pm
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
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Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff

ha this is cool.