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November 18, 2011
By mrow363akarobinhood GOLD, Jenks, Oklahoma
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sunset fades the day slips away along with all the things you did not say what would have changed what things might be if only you said what you wanted it burns you inside burns you alive as it eats at your conscious and tears away at your life speak up and spread light

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mrow363akarobinhood GOLD said...
on Sep. 5 2012 at 10:45 pm
mrow363akarobinhood GOLD, Jenks, Oklahoma
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hey where have you been
RaveFire PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 16 2011 at 11:11 pm
RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Sometimes You Have To Give Up Your Life To Save It.&quot; ~some book that i don&#039;t remember the name of<br /> <br /> &quot;Live Life Like There&#039;s No Yesterday&quot; ~ random billboard<br /> <br /> &quot;If No One Can Hurt You, Then Nobody Loves You&quot; ` ~ Kerli?

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mikes my good friend, i wouldnt be worried loki, if he didnt want critisism, he wouldnt have posted it
Prometheus PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 9 2011 at 8:08 pm
Prometheus PLATINUM, East Aurora, New York
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Sorry if I offended you... just my honest opinion.
kaylarocks SILVER said...
on Dec. 9 2011 at 7:10 pm
kaylarocks SILVER, AURORA, Colorado
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&quot;The more you take responsibility for your past and present, the more you are able to create the future you seek.&quot; - Author Unknown

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umm, sorry mikes my buddie and im honna have to stand up for him, i dont care if this peom is good or bad please keep the negatives away from this, its a scriblle to you and a piece of work to him, i really dont like confronting people but friends do thingd for friends snd thats an action ii just did.
Prometheus PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 9 2011 at 4:37 pm
Prometheus PLATINUM, East Aurora, New York
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Even if you don't want to edit your poem, you should at least try to separate it into stanzas.  Or capitalize. Or use punctuation.  Right now it's really nothing more than a scribble.
RaveFire PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 5 2011 at 8:23 pm
RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
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&quot;Sometimes You Have To Give Up Your Life To Save It.&quot; ~some book that i don&#039;t remember the name of<br /> <br /> &quot;Live Life Like There&#039;s No Yesterday&quot; ~ random billboard<br /> <br /> &quot;If No One Can Hurt You, Then Nobody Loves You&quot; ` ~ Kerli?

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gosh mike.....this is really good. ive read it quite a few times but it seems like every time i read it, i understand it a little bit more
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 10:13 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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I think it's missing something, I'd almost say that maybe you need to restructure it, but when I really start to think, it's perfectly structured just the way it is, it really reads like a slowly sinking, striped sunset :)

 

TheNerdGirl PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 2:46 pm
TheNerdGirl PLATINUM, Glen Ellyn, Illinois
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hey its alex might be late to chat mom is taking me to one of my uncles shows will be done at 8:30 but i still might but 10 or 15 minutes late sorry dont be mad
Neeon BRONZE said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 11:42 pm
Neeon BRONZE, Everywhere, Wyoming
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&ldquo;Please. I am the queen of careful. Also, princess of punk fabulousness.&rdquo; <br /> ― Rachel Caine

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Add more to it. . . it's really good so far just needs some more information
savetheplanet PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 22 2011 at 10:25 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
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Not bad, I like the imagery :D  You've only been here like 7 days?  Newbie XD  When can I find you on the TI Chat?  And btw, I love Ranger's Apprentice too! <3
NeverSayShhh SILVER said...
on Nov. 22 2011 at 12:03 pm
NeverSayShhh SILVER, Two Rivers, Wisconsin
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\&quot;i dont think your beautiful, i think your beyond it\&quot; [lil wayne]

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i agree with penny but otherwise its good (:
PennyM.L SILVER said...
on Nov. 22 2011 at 11:34 am
PennyM.L SILVER, Lynwood, California
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try making stanzas. It will flow better that way.