I like the feel of this poem, but there are several awkward bits (in other words, thank you for asking my help on something I can actually help on!). First off, you misspelled the title.

stanza 1-- you missed a period at the end. I also like the assonance (you/room)

stanza 2-- "to pound" breaks the rhythm . . . the accent of the next word should fall where the "to" is (syllable-wise). I am looking to get that assonace again, because you set the precedent in the first stanza. You need to be consistant, so if you don't put any assonances for the other ones, take it out of the first stanza.

stanza 3-- the 2nd line is awkward. Try mixing it up and being a little more original. End the stanza in a question mark

stanza 4-- this is weak . . . I get what you're trying to say, but you could say it much more effectively. I don't see the point of the note/smile part. Space after "But,"

stanza 5--move the question mark . . . either to the second line, or to the last. Change "once" to "when" . . . or maybe change the whole line to "when you back away as you hear"

And move the question mark to the last line from the second-last line.