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Good vs Evil

February 19, 2013
By gogirl123 BRONZE, University City, Missouri
gogirl123 BRONZE, University City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
go get em'!


In all of us,there is a war. A war of Good vs Evil. I can feel it destroying me slowly. For now, Good prevails, but I can FEEL THE EVIL, rising, rising, slowly rising. And one dark night, very soon indeed, when the steely fangs of Evil are sharpened, poised, and ready to strike, oh yes, Evil will rise, and WE will have to choose. And we may regret that choice.


The author's comments:
I felt dark when I wrote this.

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on Nov. 11 2013 at 10:48 am
gogirl123 BRONZE, University City, Missouri
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
go get em'!

what do I need to correct, i'm all ears. :)

on Nov. 11 2013 at 10:47 am
gogirl123 BRONZE, University City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
go get em'!

thank you very much.  

on Sep. 29 2013 at 2:35 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

This was great! I agree with all the things that LaChouette says. This was a great idea and though it needs some work, it is still pretty good! Nice job!

on Sep. 25 2013 at 7:58 pm
LaChouette GOLD, Mount Vernon, New York
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“And then there are the times when the wolves are silent and the moon is howling.”
- George Carlin

Hey gogirl123! I like the meaning behind your poem. I think there are some parts where you can separate the sentences so that certain lines stick out more than others and end up resonating with the reader more. For lines such as 'FEEL THE EVIL,' you may not need to capitalize those words to make them stand out to the reader. Putting words like that separately can create emphasis on their own. (If you prefer to capitalize, that's fine too). I think it will help. As for grammar and spelling, both are pretty good. Nice Job! (If anything I said doesn't make sense, just ask me to clarify. I'm not the greatest at explaining things..)