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March 20, 2013
By LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

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I don’t dare say your name, for what might I hear?
When I stutter it out loud my body shivers in fear-
It’s sleek down the spine but cringes at the ear.
I’ll avoid your face, for I know what a sight.
It’s like walking with my eyes closed and searching for a light.


The silence in your voice says you’ve got nothing to lose, that’s why you do things I’d never choose.
You’re on a tight ripe above water, but you can’t even swim.
While inching your way to the other side, a tear rolls down, you’re starting to cry.
That’s not the sad part, my dear friend, for our friendship has come to an end.
I can’t help you because you never helped back, so your on your own, I’ve strayed from the pack.
Good luck with that and good luck with this, you’re something I may not even miss.

© Cerys W., Marblehead, MA

The author's comments:
It breaks my heart; it makes me sad to think of all the times we had. You made me laugh and you made me cry. And all that I can do is sigh and wonder why.
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Wings10FeetTall GOLD said...
on May. 2 2013 at 4:48 pm
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
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May your words be sharp.<br /> - Christopher Paolini<br /> <br /> <br /> Nobody&#039;s going to wait for you, so do it now.<br /> -Ingrid Michaelson<br /> <br /> <br /> Broken hearts heal, but never the same.<br /> - Jessica Romo<br /> <br /> Idiots rely on luck.<br /> -Sherlock Holmes

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This is an amazing poem. I loved it! I don't think that I've ever read one quite like it. There was so much emotion in it. One of your most brillaint works.
BlurAngel GOLD said...
on Apr. 9 2013 at 9:38 pm
BlurAngel GOLD, Bexleyheath, Other
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WOW... this is A M A Z I N G.. simply W O N D E R F U L L..... Loved it.....
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 6:35 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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&quot;Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light&quot; --Dylan Thomas

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Wow Lexus! This is by far my favorite of your pieces! It is filled with so much raw emotion. The line "it's like walking with my eyes closed and searching for the light" is perfect. Absolutely flawless. I am floored. Amazing imagery and I love ow it rhymed. Can't believe I didn't check this out before! 5/5 stars. Just so you know this is totally relatable, and you can move a lot of people with this poem. I can't even tell you how many people I know have completely abandoned my freindship. It sucks. But u know what.... If they can't see the genius in u then they are not worth it. Again, amazing job!
mnm08 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 3 2013 at 7:04 pm
mnm08 BRONZE, Grande Prairie, Texas
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I love the emotion that is molded into the poem , it makes it very natural :) I especially like the part where it says "the silence in your voice says you've got nothing to lose, that's why you do things I'd never choose" , beautiful :) 
Mckay ELITE said...
on Apr. 3 2013 at 2:15 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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First, when I read the title all i could think was Good Luck Chuck and Good Luck Charlie. Don't know why. Lol. Anyway the ending is very good. And the words flow smoothly so nicely. Great poem.
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 1 2013 at 7:22 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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The rhythm in this is very well done; it flows naturally and there is a clear beat. I also like the fact that you did not seem to stretch for rhymes. Overall, a very well written poem. You managed to say a lot without exactly spelling it all out, which I really enjoyed. Great work!
Helena_Noel BRONZE said...
on Apr. 1 2013 at 1:03 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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The flow gets a little wonky in the second half, but not too bad. I found the line "I'll avoid your face, for I know what a sight." To be a little confusing. I loved the first stanza otherwise, though, and you ended the poem qite cleverly! Good job!
LexusMarie PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 31 2013 at 11:23 am
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Thank you very much! I really, really appreciate it!
writergirl36 GOLD said...
on Mar. 31 2013 at 10:26 am
writergirl36 GOLD, Chattanooga, Tennessee
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This is very well written!!! I love how descriptive it was!!! You are an amazing writer. Keep writing!!!!
LexusMarie PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 29 2013 at 3:08 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

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Where it says 'ripe' it's supposed to be 'rope'! Ha! Sorry.