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I'm reaching out

May 18, 2013
By Metalhead08 GOLD, Port Republic, Maryland
Metalhead08 GOLD, Port Republic, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather hate you for everything you are. Than ever love you for something you are not. " FFDP "You're born alone and you die alone" FFDP "I wonder out where you can't see, inside my shell I wait and bleed." Slipknot " If youre 555 then I am 666"


I'm reaching out
I'm scared as hell
I'm broken and alone
I can't give it any more
I'm barely hanging on
Taking away the pain with the jagged edge
Pain knowing my faults are my shame,
That I'm the one to blame
I can't even tell you how it came to an end,
A regret that I made , Now I live in the shade
Afraid of my sorrows, Not wanting to live in the darkness shadows,
I've made for myself
A living hell, I await for Satan to take me away
I'm done living this worthless life day by day
It's already may ,
And can't fix my mistake
I don't know why I thought a life without you was better,
Your really all I need
I promised a time worth forever ,
And you know I don't break,
I'm yours to take
My arms are held out for your sweet embrace
I don't apologize,
I simply want to it set right
My deceiving facade I made
Your the one made for me
As I am you
I swear I feel fulfillment,
No need for commitment
Still young and need to be a little free
There are things I swear I know now
If I would have known then I would have fixed it
I'm sorry I didn't, Now I have
Please don't judge me by the past, I have erased my mistakes
Please...take me
I never stopped loving you, I tried to make it go away
And it didn't
Came back and lit a raging fire
You are my desire
I remember all those good times, I cry myself to sleep
Every night thinking maybe I'll drown in tears
Blood pulsing through my veins no longer
I really still care, make it fair
I swear my love...
I'll make it right...even if I die
And that's not a lie
Everything I do
Reminds me of you


The author's comments:
I confess my love.

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on May. 30 2013 at 9:18 pm
Metalhead08 GOLD, Port Republic, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather hate you for everything you are. Than ever love you for something you are not. " FFDP "You're born alone and you die alone" FFDP "I wonder out where you can't see, inside my shell I wait and bleed." Slipknot " If youre 555 then I am 666"

Thank you for your comment! This was one of my really crappy ones :( I just kinda bsed this one, but I will work on the the structure and making it more interesting for the reader. Thanks :)

ephemeral GOLD said...
on May. 30 2013 at 7:26 pm
ephemeral GOLD, Park City, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All that is gold does not glitter/Not all those who wander are lost/The old that is strong does not wither/Deep roots are not reached by the frost"

This poem is a unique blend of free verse and rhyme structure, which makes it that much more interesting to read. I like the message, but I think the word choice could be reworded to include less cliched sayings i.e. "you're all I really need" "I'm yours to take" "I never stopped loving you" "you are my desire". These are all sayings you hear in a million different ways both in print and colloquial sayings, especially when talking about love. I challenge you to really meditate on your feelings for this boy and write them out in the most whimsical way that they appear to you. Imagine them in fantastical shapes and colors and you'll begin to write about emotions know one's ever named before. I challenge you to take the raw emotion driving this poem, because there is obviously emotion, and revamp it into something unique. Look to song lyrics, books, shapes in the clouds, etc. and your inspiration will come sooner than you think