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This is not a haiku.

October 9, 2010
By apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
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"DON'T PANIC." ~from The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams

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Defiled by the dirt
of my own thoughts
no water can rinse me clean.

© Erin H., Carrollton, TX

The author's comments:
It's not strictly a haiku, but the minimalist idea is there.
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AlexanderQ GOLD said...
on Dec. 5 2012 at 7:14 pm
AlexanderQ GOLD, Oak Creek, Colorado
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Hi! Like I promised I am reviewing some of your work! I really like this haiku. I like the different and abnormal syllables and structure, however, my stupid perfectionist mind almost wants it to be in regular haiku form, so maybe play around with that? But overall I like the deep meaning of the poem. It really makes you think.
SecretFlame PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 11:32 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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I love it!
Markus SILVER said...
on Jan. 7 2011 at 7:16 pm
Markus SILVER, Boulder, Colorado
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That's awesome. Maybe it was subliminal. 
apocalyptigirl BRONZE said...
on Jan. 7 2011 at 6:42 pm
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
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Thanks! I didn't intend that at first, but then I looked back and realized I had them.
Markus SILVER said...
on Jan. 7 2011 at 3:56 pm
Markus SILVER, Boulder, Colorado
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I like that you have exactly 17 syllables, in spite of it not having the same structure. I think that was a good way to shake up the poem.