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Lovely Kisses

April 25, 2011
By Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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Our lovely kisses,
are like tiny static shocks,
that connect us now.

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IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 1 2011 at 12:50 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

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Very sweet :)))
TheHangingGirl BRONZE said...
on Aug. 1 2011 at 12:08 am
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
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Wow.  My first kiss sounds like this...
Raytheraym PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 12 2011 at 1:16 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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Merci beaucoup!
SecretFlame PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 11 2011 at 9:54 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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Great poem. Absolutely fantastic! The imagery is really amazing!
Raytheraym PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 11 2011 at 12:20 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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Thank you! I like the title as is though. :)
APL123 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 7 2011 at 7:03 pm
APL123 BRONZE, ..., New Jersey
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i like the image of tiny static shocks...

but i was wondering if maybe you could have the tilte be "static" because the image of kisses is something that is used often

SamiLou SILVER said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 7:16 pm
SamiLou SILVER, Lee&#39s Summit, Missouri
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&quot;Imagining the future is a kind of nostalgia&quot;<br /> -John Green (Looking For Alaska)

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I was thinking make it into "that now connect us"
Raytheraym PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 6:30 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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Thanks! Yeah, the 'now' annoys me, but I needed that fifth syllable.
Raytheraym PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 6:29 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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Um, thanks. It is supposed to be sweet.
SamiLou SILVER said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 2:35 pm
SamiLou SILVER, Lee&#39s Summit, Missouri
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&quot;Imagining the future is a kind of nostalgia&quot;<br /> -John Green (Looking For Alaska)

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i love the imagery of "tiny static shocks". beautiful! it reminds me of seeing fireworks when you kiss someone :) but you might want to reconsider the placement of the word "now". if it was me i would put it after "that"
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 9:51 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
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&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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You're welcome!!!!! ;))
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 2:43 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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hmm.. sweet? yes, definitely sweet..
Raytheraym PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 5 2011 at 1:23 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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Thanks! :)
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 5 2011 at 11:32 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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Yeah that is really good!!!!!:))
Raytheraym PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 4 2011 at 10:31 am
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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Thank you both! :)
HaleyDRog. GOLD said...
on Jun. 3 2011 at 9:23 pm
HaleyDRog. GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
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I really love this piece. It has a great and unique message!
redhairCat PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 3 2011 at 8:36 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
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Interesting! I see that you like haiku.