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A Love Forsaken

December 13, 2011
By beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt


No one can ever
understand the pain I feel
from losing you so.

No one hears my screams
of anguish or sees my face
streaked with tears.

Alone I suffer in
silence, reliving the sting
of your betrayal.

I threw away all
of the letters you wrote--now
stained with deceit.

Confused I feel
in so many ways--how could
this have happened?

The red rose that once
was precious and beautiful,
lays withered, broken.



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on May. 26 2012 at 10:22 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Really interesting comment--this poem is part of my earlier work, so I was a little hesitant in constructing a poem of this subject, a love gone wrong. But I see that the middle could've been longer. Actually, I thought the last stanza with the "withering rose" was trite and overdone, but I'm pleasantly surprised that u like it.

on May. 25 2012 at 2:11 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference.&quot;

The body of the poem, due to the amazing talents I've seen in your other work, could be more imaginative. A perfect example of this kind of striking imagery is at the end of this poem with the "withering rose"--a knock out line. I loved that part, truly great