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Razorblades

July 9, 2011
By Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
16 articles 5 photos 151 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had."


Rustling of newly fallen furrowed leaves,
Penetrating wind flies between the pack,
Huddled form, hearing only as she grieves,
No one moves, only words of pain attack,
Bottle broken, shards covering the form,
Coppery liquid running down cut wrists,
Thunder, pounding rain joining to the storm,
The crowds disperse, only one soul persists,
Hand reaches outward, fingers intertwined,
He holds her close, whispering in her ear,
Fight for your life, no matter how unkind,
When it’s too hard to take, I will be here,
Dropping the razor, forgetting the pain,
Never used again to slice her own vein.


The author's comments:
I have always been very sensitive to teens like myself who are going through the pain of cutting or alcohol abuse. I wanted to show this in this sonnet, and how you can always get through it, because someone out there cares for you and who you are. I want people to read this and think twice the next time they want to say something hurtful, it might be doing more than just cutting down their ego.

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on Jul. 14 2011 at 12:07 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
16 articles 5 photos 151 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had."

Thank youu so much!

on Jul. 14 2011 at 12:06 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
16 articles 5 photos 151 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had."

Thank you for the thoughtful comment!

on Jul. 14 2011 at 8:14 am
CieraDesiree GOLD, Hagerstown, Indiana
17 articles 1 photo 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye only makes the whole world blind.<br /> You never know what you have until it&#039;s gone.

I love this. Very nice word choices also. I can totally relate.

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on Jul. 13 2011 at 11:25 pm
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

This is a fantastic piece of writing.  I am so amazed at your writing talents!  It's a very sad and sensitive subject to write about, but I think you did a wonderful job.  The imagery was intense, even a bit disturbing at parts, but that really added to the whole mood of the piece. Great job!

on Jul. 13 2011 at 5:44 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
16 articles 5 photos 151 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had.&quot;

Thank you!!

on Jul. 13 2011 at 5:43 pm
xXx_Fox_xXx BRONZE, Conbe, Iowa
4 articles 1 photo 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Where a rose is, a thistle can not grow&quot; ~The Secret Garden<br /> &quot;Be the change you wish to see in the world&quot; ~Ghandi<br /> &quot;Every road leads somewhere, its just a matter of where you want to go...&quot; ~???

Wow I love the line

"coppery liquid running down her arms!!"

Nice!


on Jul. 13 2011 at 5:34 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
16 articles 5 photos 151 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had.&quot;

Thank you!

on Jul. 13 2011 at 5:31 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I can do anything!&quot;

Wow - that is so touching! I really like the message! Great job!