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Robbed of Innocence

June 3, 2011
By JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
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&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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I was young when I thought the world was fun,
I knew Prince Charming would surely come,
I thought war was a game and didn’t murder with a gun,
I was innocent and no one was dumb,
no one would yet cause a scar across my heart,
to me no one died,
and I didn’t know love could tear apart,
and from no one was happiness disqualified,
I could say: “I forgive,
everything you have done,
and I let live,”
and I knew no reason to call 9-1-1,
childhood innocence can be robbed with a kiss,
and our unscarred hearts we do miss!

© Lara C., Norwalk, CT

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This is the first sonnet I have EVER written!I hope you like it. Please comment. :D
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JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 6:21 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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You're very welcome!!!! I'll read them as soon as I can!!! :D
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 6:19 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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Thanks alot!!!!!!! :))
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 6:18 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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Oh Really!!!!!!! Thanks so much!!! Is there anything of yours you'd like me to read? :))
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 6:14 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
41 articles 0 photos 650 comments

Favorite Quote:
&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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A sonnet should follow iambic pentameter. Ten syllables in each line, that's what meter is. :))
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 6:10 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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Ummmm  the dictionary said a sonnet had 13 lines, so I looked at one of shakespeare's Sonnet 130 and then went from there.  Sorry, but thanks for reading and I'll work on all of that! Thanks! :)
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 6:03 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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What do you mean by a meter? Thank so much!!!!!!!! :D
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 1 2011 at 7:47 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
41 articles 0 photos 650 comments

Favorite Quote:
&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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The only problem you have is the meter. Other than that, this is great!
Eirias SILVER said...
on Aug. 1 2011 at 7:46 pm
Eirias SILVER, Spring, Texas
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&quot;If you wish to be a writer, write&quot; -Epictetus

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The definition of a sonnet is: a poem of 14 lines with a strict rhyme scheme and specific structer. When I think of sonnet I think of a Shakespearian sonnet--14 lines, iambic pentameter; ABAB,CDCD,EFEF,GG rhyme scheme. This does not fit the definition of a sonnet. I am as yet unable to find whether you used iambs, trochees, dactyls, ect., but they DEFINATELY don't have the same amount of syllables.

 

Which isn't to say it's not good, but it's not a sonnet.

Keep it up!

If you wouldn't mind reading "Relative Perspectives" in the forum, it also has an in-depth discussion on iambic pentameter. Thanks!

ams98 said...
on Aug. 1 2011 at 7:46 pm
ams98, Brighton, Michigan
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This is my favortite poem of yours:) I love it:)))))) GREAT JOB!!
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 1 2011 at 7:43 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
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&quot;We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot.&quot; -Eleanor Roosevelt

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Wow, this is SO good! Great job!
thetruthawaits94 SILVER said...
on Jul. 31 2011 at 9:43 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

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Sure any of my four poems on the site would be nice. maybe the ocean waves to me or no matter how long you search for perfect, or never falling! Thank you so much!
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 31 2011 at 4:06 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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don't worry I won't stop!!!!!! Thnk you sooooooooo much!!!!!!!!! :D
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 31 2011 at 4:04 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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Really! Thnks a whole bunch!!!!! Thank you soooo much!!!!!!!
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 31 2011 at 2:16 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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Thank you so much I'll keep that in mind. Anything of yours you'd like me to read? :D
thetruthawaits94 SILVER said...
on Jul. 30 2011 at 5:39 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 351 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

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I like it but some of the rhymes seem a TINY bit forced. For example the died... love disqualified part and the forgive and let live. Just some constructive criticism. I love the theme of this poem! 
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 30 2011 at 5:17 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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Beautiful. You rhyme well.
JTboiiDrama PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 30 2011 at 4:43 pm
JTboiiDrama PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
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It is what it is

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This is a MASTERPIECE. Perfect. Keep Writing and Never Stop!!!!!!