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Opulence MAG

May 1, 2008
By AquaGem SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
AquaGem SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

Life it too short to let you matter.


I’ve been watching him for days now. When he leaves his house to go to school, I’m the one carefully tailing him, switching cars every day to make myself look less suspicious. If he ever sneaks out of his second-story room, I’ll be the one silently watching from a nearby tree. In class when he turns, feeling eyes on the back of his head, I’m the one who sent the hair on the back of his neck up on end. I am the girl whose shadow is always slightly overlapping his.

Being assigned to watch him almost makes me
feel like I’m not a stalker. Though I’m only 17, I’m a full-fledged member of the organization known as O.P.U.L.E.N.C.E. I’ve been with them since the ­tender age of five. It’s my home. Being an orphan, my office is also my permanent residence, the couch a fold-out bed. There are many others like me: no family. A lot of us are loners and haven’t chosen this route for ourselves.

I’m a tracker. I have been for years and some might say that I am the best at not being the best. In other words, I’m great at being invisible. Or at not being noticed. It’s not as hard as the others in the organization think. Being young and female is good, since most we track are young. Seeing me around younger people – my age, actually – doesn’t raise alarm bells. It helps that I’m cute. With a small frame, light hazel eyes, and short blond hair that curls under my chin, I don’t appear threatening. Of course, my ­organization-funded training doesn’t back that theory.

Soon I won’t be tracking down others with the power. They are finally going to give me an apprentice. After years of mastering everything I’ve been taught, they see my potential. That’s not to say I know everything. Even with my extended life I won’t be able to learn all the things I want to. If only this annoying boy would show the signs. It’s been almost a week. If he doesn’t show soon, they’ll reassign me. That much longer until I get my apprentice.

So here I am, sipping a latté and waiting for the Target to leave for school. I have been put in all of his classes in case something happens there, though I graduated high school years ago. Private tutors sped things up. With no family or personal ties, I had lots of time to devote to my studies. Martial arts black belts. Twelve languages, not including English. Everything a girl needs for a serious career in the agency. Such positions of power are not handed out easily. You must prove yourself many times over.

The Target and I have never spoken, but I know a lot about him. His file told me some, but after watching him for only a few days, I feel confident in saying that I know things no one else does. Not just the obvious, either. He resents his father and is protective of his mother, which makes me suspect the father is less than faithful. He smiles often but doesn’t make a lot of eye contact. He usually only speaks when spoken to. Although he has many friends, he isn’t close with any of them. The Target is observant, a watcher. This leads me to believe we would get along if he shows any promise.

I look down at my watch, then back at his house a few blocks away. The Target is late, which means I’ll be late too. Today my ride is a shiny black sports car, not out of place in this suburb full of midlife-crisis men. I turn on the engine impatiently. I’m fiddling with the radio when I hear something. I don’t feel any immediate danger, and I know to trust those feelings. But I ­also know that something is off.

Just as I am about to get out of the car and pretend to look in the trunk, the passenger door opens. I look up in surprise as the Target slides into the seat next to me. I grin, quite pleased by this turn of events. This is definitely a good sign. Perhaps intuition is strong in him. That would be good for my apprentice to have, complementary. I could handle having to deal with that.

“Hello, Lenna. Why have you been following me for a week now?” the Target asks lightly, conversationally, his first words ever said in my direction.

Ah, one of my many aliases. The organization set it up so that whenever I’m on a case, I get a new name, past, and present. It’s very powerful. The organization can basically do anything it needs; it has people everywhere imaginable. I’m just one of many, though there aren’t that many at the top, as I am. They don’t trust many to be trackers. Or to be apprentices. All of the full members have the power, though we control others to get things done.

My smile deepens as I say in my authoritative, professional voice, “My real name is Jade. I am a witch of the moon and a tracker for the organization known as O.P.U.L.E.N.C.E. You are also a witch. We would like to formally welcome you into the organization as my apprentice. Here is my card for verification.”

Jade Wordsworth
Tracker for O.P.U.L.E.N.C.E
Official Political Understanding Lending ­Everyone ­Navigation for Co-Existing Ethereals
Office hours: 8 a.m.-3 p.m. Mon-Sat
Phone: 555-5555
Proud league of witches of the sun and moon.
Worldwide.

“What do you mean ‘moon and sun’? Or ‘tracker’?” he asks, still looking at my card like it’s going to ­disappear.

“Types of magic. Moon is all about spells, the sun is more potion-based, though each type of witchcraft involves the other somehow. As a tracker, I find people like you and I bring them to O.P.U.L.E.N.C.E. Every witch must register, train, and become a member by law. In fact, the organization is like a government targeted toward witches,” I explain with a smile, loving the fact that this time I get to teach the newbie.

“Magic? Seriously?” he asks, eyes wide, meeting mine. They are large, yellow, and catlike.

I click a button on my left, automatically locking the doors. I put the car into drive, pulling out onto the road. As an afterthought I add as a courtesy, “I think you had better come with me.” .



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on Jan. 29 2010 at 4:03 pm
Waterlogged BRONZE, Grapevine, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Winston, you are drunk." To which Churchill responded, "and you, madam, are ugly. But in the morning, I'll be sober,"-Lady Astor and Winston Churchill

Wow. I can imagine this as a book.

on Jan. 29 2010 at 2:04 am
HeadshotM SILVER, Melbourne, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Your failure is my success

Help!!!

someone must comment and read my ARTICLE!!!!!

*collapses on the the ground in a seizure and has a heart attack at the same time*

Tim-.- SILVER said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 2:49 pm
Tim-.- SILVER, Markham, Other
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Favorite Quote:
We all screw up sometimes, just some people more than others

WOW. This is brilliant :D

If there is more , I cant wait for it

on Jan. 27 2010 at 1:39 pm
Alpha-Lyrae GOLD, Toronto, ON, Other
13 articles 3 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I've loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night." -Galileo Galilei
"In the Beginning, the universe was created. This made a lot of people angry and has been widely regarded as a bad move." -Douglas Adams

Brilliant, i enjoy that somehow magic managed to get into there........ And i like the tone of the writing.

on Jan. 27 2010 at 11:31 am
Shambler92 PLATINUM, Buenos Aires, Other
37 articles 0 photos 65 comments
can definitely write. But the subject has been so overused it's almost annoying to keep reading this teenage magic stories. you don't have to go beyond reality to make something interesting. it's already been done (too many times)

on Jan. 26 2010 at 6:43 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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Oh my God this is sooo good. You should seriously write more, it's so good it's not even funny... i can't write that seriously

ah7_111 said...
on Jan. 23 2010 at 12:47 pm
cool story. can you check out mine?
http ://www.teenink .com /fiction/action_adventure/article/162984/Hanging-On/

on Jan. 22 2010 at 9:30 pm
Oooo, very cool! Love it! More please! Though I agree a little with sleeplessdreamer: the whole story line is suspiciously familiar. But it's still cool. :)

on Jan. 15 2010 at 7:54 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Your writing is great, but the whole story line is supiciously familiar. And I know it sounds desperate, but check out my work and comment- because technically I am desperate for someone to read my stuff....

khonsu BRONZE said...
on Jan. 11 2010 at 7:14 am
khonsu BRONZE, Floral Park New York, New York
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Everything is really well written exept the dialouge. its just a little bit to bland. the narrationm is awesome though

on Jan. 10 2010 at 4:18 pm
makeupsomethinglater BRONZE, Bailieboro, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I've never been an intellectual but I have this look

This was really good, even if there was a bit of cliché with the magic

J. Rae said...
on Jan. 7 2010 at 6:30 pm
I think you should make it more original too. Make up a new name instead of using witches and stuff like "sun and moon". Although I haven't read the full book so it might work. It just depends on how you do it.Stephanie Meyer totally changed vampires from coffins, basements, fangs, and sleeping during the day to shimmery, godlike, fangless, super powers, and awesome speed and strength. You could do something like that.

J. Rae said...
on Jan. 7 2010 at 5:55 pm
I agree with sallysunshine. It was a little boring. You have to make the words flow more. There was too much descriptive words. Use your first paragraph. Then you might want to cut the second paragraph because it is so confusing.

J. Rae said...
on Jan. 7 2010 at 5:43 pm
That's OK! Thanks for trying.

AquaGem SILVER said...
on Jan. 7 2010 at 5:28 pm
AquaGem SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

Life it too short to let you matter.

Hmmm I'm actually not sure! I submitted this article online and it was on teeninkraw before being in the mag. Sorry I couldn't help!

J. Rae said...
on Jan. 7 2010 at 3:20 pm
If an article is published in the magazine then do the people post it on the internet too or do you have to do that yourself?

J. Rae said...
on Jan. 6 2010 at 4:01 pm
I just read Held Hostage and I think you should put a sequel up.

J. Rae said...
on Jan. 5 2010 at 8:35 pm
This was great but to make it even better you should make it more exciting by demonstrating some magic or something like that. It was still awsome thoigh, I gave it a five stars.

on Jan. 5 2010 at 5:49 pm
hworld123 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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i like the natural flow... kind of reminds me of that book "So Yesterday" though...

on Jan. 5 2010 at 2:28 pm
AnneOnnimous BRONZE, Peterborough Ontario, Other
3 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Saying 'I notice you're a nerd' is like saying, 'Hey, I notice that you'd rather be intelligent than be stupid, that you'd rather be thoughtful than be vapid, that you believe that there are things that matter more than the arrest record of Lindsay Lohan. Why is that?' In fact, it seems to me that most contemporary insults are pretty lame. Even 'lame' is kind of lame. Saying 'You're lame' is like saying 'You walk with a limp.' Yeah, whatever, so does 50 Cent, and he's done all right for himself."
— John Green

its okay. the writing is good- not fabulous, but good, with a few mistakes- and the idea i thought was good, until it got into witchcraft. at that part i just thought it was kinda cliche, with the harry potter- like school place that teaches magic. plz read my story ivory, btw :)