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Understand: A Title Within The Poem And At The End

August 30, 2011
By IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Watermelon breath.
Lake-wet hair, canoeing. Stars,
Moon, marshmallow roasts.

Pizza, pool grass.
Sunflowers, dandelions,
Sun-scent skin, smiles.

Four leaf clovers, no
school, bare feet, freedom. Garden.
Jubilant hand-stands.

SUMMER

© Julianne R., Westborough, MA

The author's comments:
It started with the first line, come to mind and doodled whilst, funnily enough, watching a movie set in Autumn.
I had hoped that I could do italics in the poem, to show the title, but I guess capitals will have to do.
(Dragonflies and Damselflies are awesome.)
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IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 13 2012 at 5:54 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Gracias, harrypotterlover :)

Why do you particularly appreciate the title?

chrisvfree PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 2 2012 at 2:33 pm
chrisvfree PLATINUM, N/A, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
I pretty much try to stay in a constant state of confusion just because of the expression it leaves on my face. - Johnny Depp

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Beautiful imagery! An innocent description of summer at its best. I particularly appreciate the title...
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 17 2012 at 10:39 am
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Diola lle, it's always good when something I write invokes personal memories/images in the reader :)
Writer_Jordan GOLD said...
on Mar. 17 2012 at 1:14 am
Writer_Jordan GOLD, Ellicott City, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
All that is gold does not glitter,<br /> Not all those who wander are lost;<br /> The old that is strong does not wither,<br /> Deep roots are not reached by the frost.<br /> From the ashes a fire shall be woken,<br /> A light from the shadows shall spring;<br /> Renewed shall be blade that was broken,<br /> The crownless again shall be king.

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This poem not only sums up my summer, but also brings back good memories...refreshing poem
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 8:42 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Not really :/ I'm working on tons of stuff, though, if you know what I mean ;)

Mostly I just post new poems and stuff on my blog.

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 8:33 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

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Got it! Now, go delete it! Right now! ;)

Thanks, you did a BIG favor for me! 

By the way, Are you working on anything new, writing wise? 

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 8:07 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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I answered earlier today, let me know that you have it so I can delete the comment :)
Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 7:29 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

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That's OK. Still haven't answered my question though.  'cause I know you have his address! ;)(blog) 

It's ok if you forgot about the email, don't forget though. Just put in on a sticky-note. :) 

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 4:15 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Haha, thanks XD

I can't see either of the comments you speak of, I wonder if they got labeled as spam?... Nope, I guess they just didn't post or something.

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 12:10 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

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You are so welcome. :)

So me and Liz are think of being old-school pen pals with Raven. Agreed? By chance, did you find his email? If not, that's Ok!:)

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 5 2012 at 4:18 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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It's so great to have you back, Aderes :)

I'm very glad you like my poem, hantale, Adear ;)

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Mar. 3 2012 at 9:05 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

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Perfect!

It's just such a perfetc poem about summer, I love it! :)

When I think of summer, I also think about teen ink and hanging out with you guys. :) ;) :(

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 31 2011 at 4:52 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Thanks :)

 

Hannibal_the_Vegetarian_Cannibal SILVER said...
on Oct. 29 2011 at 3:09 pm
Hannibal_the_Vegetarian_Cannibal SILVER, A Nice Place In, Virginia
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&quot;Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it&#039;s about learning to dance in the rain.&quot; ~Anonymous<br /> <br /> <br /> &quot;For he loved her, as you can only love someone who is an echo of yourself in your time of deepest sorrow.&quot; ~ Orson Scott Card

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Wow . . . really good! I love the imagery. But I agree with leafy on the fact that the flow could be better. Just the "no" at the end of the first line in the last set is a bit abrupt, but I know haikus are hard. Overall, great job!

4/5

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 5:41 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Thanks, Taphephobia! :)
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 5:40 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Thanks :)

 

VandalSpirit DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 5:09 pm
VandalSpirit DIAMOND, Pleasant Prairie, Wisconsin
51 articles 9 photos 185 comments

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Yet this I call to mind and therefore I have hope: Because of Gods great love, we are not consumed. His compassion never fail. They are new every morning; great is your faithfulness.

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I liked this and I'm not normally a fan of haikus. Nice job.
leafy said...
on Oct. 19 2011 at 7:43 am
leafy, City, Other
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Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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I love haiku sets, and this one is really good ^_^ the only other thing I will say though is that the flow could be a bit better, but it is harder to do that on haikus. Nice job!
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 10 2011 at 5:11 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Always glad to make someone smile :)

Thanks for all of your lovely comments!

Love.Hate.Passion. said...
on Oct. 7 2011 at 10:55 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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~Hope. Faith. Love~<br /> ~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~<br /> ~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than<br /> a distant memory.~

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Great description of summer in a cutesy way that made me smile :)

5/5