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Him & Him

January 15, 2010
By electrichearts SILVER, Franklin Lakes, New Jersey
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electrichearts SILVER, Franklin Lakes, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"It didn't matter in the end how old they had been, or that they were girls, but only that we had loved them, and that they hadn't heard us calling, still do not hear us, up here in the tree house with our thinning hair and soft bellies, calling them out of those rooms where they went to be alone for all time, alone in suicide, which is deeper than death, and where we will never find the pieces to put them back together. "

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Commandments stone on slave-prince mountain maul
Less pay rebuke from quiet burdens pained
Thy new deems obsolete hath heaven call
Weeping doves cast crimson, edicts inane
Virtuous bride veneer exalting fifth
Wed tender beguil’d hands dearth commonplace
Forsake poor ills cherishing dev’lish sift
Abstract His binding ring; expunge thy grace
Hath said adoration shall relish flaws
Perhaps claimed forth heeding His hail and beck
Yet so accept tragedies, tender claws
Vehement joys s’rrounding thy face and neck?
Discern, breed sheep, elude, lest He appease
Exist no truer words abode of these

The author's comments:
This was written about a battered wife, who fears to leave her husband due to her commitment to God and religion, public scorn, and her husband. It does not take place in any specific place or time as such women have almost always and as long as partnerships have existed, suffered in silence. It tries to say that despite the Bible's intention to promote peace, love, and devotion in marriage, the social bind can also destroy when a spouse becomes abusive.
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sweetsymphony said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 10:16 am
jesus , this sounds so professional! the message is fantastic and unique and you could not have conveyed it better. 5 stars & keep writing. you'll go far!
liketheocean909 said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 10:14 am
this poem had me crying. keep up the awesome work! Go Girl!
Dancer727 said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 10:41 pm
Omg christina this is beautiful!

I totally had to read this mag for english, it was so good. I didnt know u could write like this its so pretty

Its sarah btw from camp
paprika said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 10:06 pm
I <3 CRISTINAAAAAAA
Funanna said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 9:36 pm
I LOVE YOU CRISTINA!! :)
zoethedog said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 9:32 pm
the vocabulary is eloquent, nice flow, 5 stars
violentstream606 said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 9:28 pm
almost better than Shakespeare himself
keeeels said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 9:26 pm
LOVE <3
Ncolre said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 9:12 pm
Nice job. Very deep
pstro_x said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 8:52 pm
very, very beautiful
cooldoc said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 2:09 pm
Fabulous! I love the depth of this sonnet. I really feel the conflict of the abused spouse.