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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Mar. 19 2012 at 2:18 pm
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on Mar. 17 2012 at 1:12 pm
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Please check out my writing, im a new poet

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on Mar. 15 2012 at 11:59 am
AnandhuKrishna BRONZE, Quilon, Other
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i understand..you are bound (by that chain)to your father's womb.Its a pure father-son love

on Mar. 15 2012 at 10:45 am
Ghosts-of-Kalen, Naperville IL, Illinois
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&quot;Mess with the Best, <br /> Die like the rest . . .&quot;

It seems you have enough comments, but it also seems that I have to say that this is a great poem :)

Rowan14 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 14 2012 at 1:23 pm
Rowan14 BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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This is an amazing poem I loved it. But what does the Father represent?

on Mar. 11 2012 at 6:16 pm
Ziggy7789 SILVER, Los Altos, California
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This is a beautiful poem, and I feel a bit stupid for asking this, but I'm a bit confused about the last stanza.

Throughout the poem, it sounds like you are trying to escape the ground, and your father is encouraging you to do so. But it says "i saw my Father pull on a chain,/ then i knew that i was bound." 

Is this referring to your father holding you back in some way, or in your father attempting to free you from your limitations? Or would you rather this be left to interpretation?


on Mar. 9 2012 at 11:14 am
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poem is real a motivator!

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on Mar. 8 2012 at 5:25 pm
svds1 BRONZE, Columbia, Missouri
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this is amazing!! simple  but structured.

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on Mar. 8 2012 at 1:40 pm
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on Mar. 8 2012 at 2:06 am
Nooneknowsme BRONZE, Ambathenna, Other
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Don`t dream your life and live your dream!! ;)

This poem is so easy but very fantastic in the selection of words! Very nice! ;)

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on Mar. 5 2012 at 9:17 pm
Blemons SILVER, Bristow, Virginia
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Interesting poem...I like the rhyme scheme. Anybody who reads this should look at my work! 

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on Mar. 1 2012 at 9:12 am
Agasaya SILVER, Puryear, Tennessee
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Very well written. I would greatly appreciate someone--or everyon--to read my work and share your feelings about them.

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on Feb. 29 2012 at 12:16 pm
lvamp1192 SILVER, Schuylerville, New York
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nice poem...

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on Feb. 28 2012 at 8:00 pm
eddys96 SILVER, Sacramento, California
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on Feb. 25 2012 at 10:21 pm
NoLi123 GOLD, Scarsdale, New York
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This was a very well written poem. I like the to-the-point style shown here; not excessively long, yet has its share of imagery. 
I recently started writing poetry of my own; could someone please read my poems and post some comments? 

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on Feb. 21 2012 at 5:22 pm
Maddyw5 GOLD, South St. Paul, Minnesota
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&quot;With brave wings, she flies&quot;

Amazing. Just amazing. Keep up the good work!

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on Feb. 18 2012 at 6:46 pm
Mani2x SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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I was born an original, I&#039;m not going to die a copy.

I heard/saw this poem somewhere else....