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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Nov. 27 2009 at 3:18 pm
BreBreezy SILVER, Carencro, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
You dont have to hold on to the pain to hold on to the memory.

your poem is very awesome....you should keepwriting

on Nov. 27 2009 at 1:23 pm
Dunkelheitstieg BRONZE, Baldwin, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"The poet ranks far below the painter in the representation of visible things, and far below the musician in that of invisible things. Why does the eye see a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination when awake?,"Leonardo da Vinci.

Awesome poem!

on Nov. 27 2009 at 10:44 am
Reaa.Mae.Kuzyk GOLD, Arborg, Manitoba, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Why live trying to just DIE, when people are DYING just for the chance to LIVE.&quot;<br /> -Anomynous<br /> <br /> &quot;Time has a wonderful way of showing us what really matters.&quot;<br /> - Margaret Peters

You definitely have caught my attention with the poem. Couldn't stop reading it over again. I absolutely love your writing, and look forward to reading more. Your words flow so well. :) Great meaning!

& Great work!!!

~Reaa.Mae~ <3

on Nov. 26 2009 at 11:23 am
saby:)**** SILVER, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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i like it alot

Nina.C said...
on Nov. 26 2009 at 10:39 am
The effectiveness prospers with every word.

on Nov. 25 2009 at 5:40 pm
alexisjo SILVER, Roanoke, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
fearless doesn&#039;t mean you&#039;re unafraid, it means you&#039;re terrified, but you jump anyway. &lt;3

Wow this is really good (:

do the world a favor, keep writing (:

on Nov. 25 2009 at 4:28 pm
revolutionary BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The fiend in his own shape is less hideous than when he rages in the breast of man&quot; - John Hawthorne

wow...just wow, excellent man

miriam SILVER said...
on Nov. 23 2009 at 10:23 pm
miriam SILVER, Skokie, Illinois
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I think I understand what this is about. And if I do I can completely relate. Check out some of my work?

hahaha said...
on Nov. 23 2009 at 6:45 pm
COol.. 0_o

on Nov. 23 2009 at 10:00 am
XOXOhaloXOXO GOLD, Ellsworth, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
I&#039;m the author of my life and, unfortunately, I&#039;m writing in pen=]

Dear Carl,

WOW! Amazing! This poem contains so many great features I don't know where to start! Good work!

NightWorldGirl

jmc.13 said...
on Nov. 23 2009 at 8:41 am
jmc.13, Dobbs Ferry, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I&#039;d rather regret what I did than what I didn&#039;t do.&quot;

This poem was brilliant. The imagery was fantastic and it really flowed well.

Congratulations on writing a superb poem!

on Nov. 20 2009 at 3:31 pm
mutekid016 GOLD, Gap, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Remember when you play like a girl used to be an insult?&quot; Mia Hamm

I agree with DEARtiffanyy. She brings up a good point.

lindsey said...
on Nov. 20 2009 at 1:58 pm
i like this poem. you should write some like this one!!

princessa101 said...
on Nov. 18 2009 at 6:03 pm
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on Nov. 18 2009 at 3:32 am
haana114 PLATINUM, -, Other
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a really nice poem with a deep meaning

on Nov. 17 2009 at 11:47 pm
hi,randomperson. GOLD, Fall City, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Love is not forbidden but it is a risky to fall into,but if its real-than you should stay true. Love is a funny thing,it cant be bought like a diamond ring. Love is greif and pain, you feel lost and insane.Love is a wonderful treasure,keep it forever

when i read this i was like can this poem be real? haha its sooo good.

Ms.me_2 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 16 2009 at 4:32 pm
Ms.me_2 BRONZE, Lake Mary, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;A womans heart should be so hidden in Christ that a man must seek him first to find her&quot;

Omg this was deep

on Nov. 15 2009 at 9:48 pm
chrisbriones GOLD, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I believe nothing can be justly and completely explained by words.&quot;

no! never believe such things! dont you ever allow yourself to see such an intangible chain which bounds you!

cherish your father. cherish everything he's done....before you regret it like i

Lanae BRONZE said...
on Nov. 15 2009 at 12:00 pm
Lanae BRONZE, Milford, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;&#039;For I know the plans I have for you,&#039; Declares the LORD, &#039;Plans to prosper you and not to harm you. Plans to give you a hope and a future.&#039;&quot; Jeremiah 29:11

awesome poem =)

on Nov. 14 2009 at 10:22 pm
Writedancelove&live GOLD, Redding, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much.&quot;<br /> &quot;Karen: If you&#039;re from Africa why are you white? Gretchen: Omg Karen, you can&#039;t just ask people why they&#039;re white.&quot;

I really like this : ) Nice job!

If you could, please check out 'Waiting'

Thank you : )