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Daddy's Womb MAG
April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.
So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.
i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.
The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.
i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.
i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.
© Anonymous
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Theraforever PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 11 2014 at 3:31 pm
I love this poem and will most likley read it perpetually till its words have no meaning. It is a phonmenal peice and tells a story with just the right amount of words and details. Never stop writing! :) - Thera
VanMartin said...
on Jul. 5 2014 at 10:29 pm
Great poem. do you think you could check out my poems too? TeenInk.com/search.php?smodel=all&sall_uid=267391
KylieKylieMarie GOLD said...
on Jul. 4 2014 at 12:03 pm
This poem is absolutly beautiful. I love it.
dani000.camp PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 4 2014 at 1:20 am
Emotional, drastic, innocent yet bold all at once. This is beautiful. I have so much more that I could say about it but I don't want to ruin something this masterful with my clunky words. I love this poem.
MindDrifter said...
on Jun. 18 2014 at 1:29 pm
I love this poem. Best one i've read around here.
JupiterTheJedi SILVER said...
on Jun. 16 2014 at 11:32 pm
I never thought about it that way before! I'm glad you mentioned that. A certain style of the way this is written makes it seem like this was written by a small child. (The i's make it seem more childlike, too.)
Love the twist at the end. I noticed how the "I" wasn't capitalized, but other words like "sea" and "father" were. I love that it symbolizes how the father and life (the "sea") are bigger than the speaker and so are able to bind the speaker to the ground/reality. Profound and concise. Love it!
Olivia-Atlet ELITE said...
on Jun. 13 2014 at 4:11 pm
LOVE this!!! Could you check out my story? It would mean a lot to me. :) TeenInk.com/fiction/thriller_mystery/article/686391/The-Dreams-that-Keep-Gettign-Darker/
BrinaJo2018 GOLD said...
on Jun. 5 2014 at 12:01 am
Every time I read this poem I love it more and more. Literally amazing. I know the "literally" might downplay the amazing to some people, but I mean it in the highest sense of the word. Absolutely fabulous!!!
catwithglasses SILVER said...
on Jun. 4 2014 at 7:18 pm
This is a really great poem. Those last few lines really tie the whole thing together and are very touching. This is very well written. Great job!
PoeticPrincess BRONZE said...
on May. 12 2014 at 10:55 am
This is an amazing poem, it really touched my soul. Great Job!!! If you guys have time please check out mine thanks!
LiveProgressing said...
on May. 10 2014 at 10:15 am
I Feel sympathy with this poem and it's a great piece of work
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