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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Jan. 30 2014 at 6:14 pm
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on Dec. 28 2013 at 9:26 pm
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on Dec. 18 2013 at 2:46 pm
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on Dec. 5 2013 at 7:11 pm
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This poem caught my attention right away. The way it rhymes and how all the words almost fit into place pulled me right in. I love how in the poem the kid wanted to try everything. He wanted to learn how to fly and swim and he never stop trying until the end. I think this is a great poem and is probably  on my list for top 10 poems I have ever read. 

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on Dec. 4 2013 at 8:26 am
mady.neal GOLD, Monrovia, Indiana
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I think that this was a really good poem!  The transition from see to sky was really elegant and you did well!  the only advice that I would give is to be careful to capitalize what needs to be (your I's).  Great job though!  

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