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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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IAndThisMystery said...
on Nov. 29 2013 at 10:59 pm
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Wow, this is an intense poem! I find it really interesting that the i's are lowercase but words like "The Sea" are capitalized--maybe a stylistic choice related to the speaker's innocence and the sea's power/vastness? Like everyone else, I'm intrigued but a little confused about the ending -- will someone reply and tell me what you think it's implying?
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Really really deep. Little confusing, but an amazing poem. Great Job! :)
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the poem left me dumbfounded! it is really great!
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on Nov. 20 2013 at 3:09 pm
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This poem was really good!  
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It has a deep meaning to it, I understand that, but am still a bit confused about the ending. Brilliant and creative rhymes though!
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Three words: I loved it!
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the end really got me, great poem!
BeautifullyChaos said...
on Nov. 11 2013 at 8:25 pm
This poem reminded me a lot of the Greek myth about Icarus. :)
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I like how this poem demonstrates the deep love as well as duty of a father for his son.
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Check your grammar but I loved the poem!
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Haunting - I love the turn around at the end!
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that is so deep and i felt like i was actually there, tht was so vivid
Jessica Whelan BRONZE said...
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Wow, deep. Love
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That's a lot of readers.
JDANGIANTS1 BRONZE said...
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I love poetry. I love this poem because it's just about you and it tell's something about yourself. Poetry is a very strong way of expressing yourself freely.
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Okay. >.>
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Hey, I think it deserves as many comments as it gets. 
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1786 comments! Do you even bother to read these anymore? 
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I believe the "i"s were lower-cased in this poem as a stylistic choice.
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To be honest I liked how it sort of just ended. It left my mind to continue running and allowed me to think of all of the other "chains" that I have in my life.