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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on May. 11 2011 at 2:17 pm
blueanddark BRONZE, Dakar, Other
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Favorite Quote:
We must learn to choose what we care about, because too much bull will drag us down.

i love this! i was so intrigued.

cutegirl97 said...
on May. 8 2011 at 6:08 pm
cutegirl97, Claysburg, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Listen to the mustn&#039;ts,child, listen to the don&#039;ts. Listen to the shouldn&#039;ts, the impossibles, the won&#039;ts.<br /> Listen to the never have&#039;s, then listen close to me ... Anything can happen, child. Anything can be.

this is a very interesting poem! keep writing!

on May. 7 2011 at 4:35 pm
 i love this poem it's the best

on May. 6 2011 at 8:34 am
Whitehouse503 SILVER, North Waterboro, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;In the end you should always do the right thing, even if it&#039;s hard.&quot;

i loooovvvvveee this poem, it's so good, keep writing more

on May. 5 2011 at 6:59 pm
stickyfingers SILVER, Wake Forest, North Carolina
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Hey, I read your comment like a week ago and it's been bothering me. I promised myself I'd not get into any theological debates while on TeenInk, but here I am anyway. You said that this poem reminded you of a relationship with God, but, in the end of the poem, the father is holding chains. God doesn't hold us in bondage until Judgement day when we are bound to our sin. I was curious if that was what you meant...? Sorry, I'm just a girl with a lot of theology stored somewhere in the prefrontal cortex! :)

~Stickyfingers

P.S. This is an awesome poem! I love it!


Slim4 BRONZE said...
on May. 5 2011 at 5:19 pm
Slim4 BRONZE, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
you wont get caught for everything you do but everything you do will catch up to you j-vega

wow thats fantastic check my wrighting out some time

 


Cubster BRONZE said...
on May. 5 2011 at 4:00 pm
Cubster BRONZE, Lindstrom, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;You may be on the right track but you&#039;ll get run over if you just sit there.&quot;

We may be able to loosen our chains, but can we ever really break free? Well, I guess maybe when we move or something.

Cubster BRONZE said...
on May. 5 2011 at 3:58 pm
Cubster BRONZE, Lindstrom, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;You may be on the right track but you&#039;ll get run over if you just sit there.&quot;

Awesome. Truly and amazingly... awesome.

on May. 5 2011 at 3:39 pm
wasauskyx BRONZE, New Haven, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I am not afraid to speak my mind. I am honest, but when I do speak my mind, I get ignored.<br /> ~me!

I love the last stanza ;P

 


on May. 5 2011 at 9:35 am
I realy like it it remindes me that we are bound down untill we finally brake free!!

on May. 4 2011 at 5:31 pm
SarahFaith PLATINUM, Hainesport, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t cry because it&#039;s over, smile because it happened.&quot;<br /> -Dr. Seuss<br /> <br /> &quot;Silence is golden, but duct tape is silver.&quot;<br /> -Unknown

I liked it a lot.  It reminded me of my relationship with my Mom.  Every time I try and break away, she pulls me back.  Some people may not understand it, but I get it.  And they'll get it too, someday.  Good job

on May. 2 2011 at 10:45 am
it was good. you need to keep writing

zoid123 GOLD said...
on May. 2 2011 at 10:30 am
zoid123 GOLD, Charlotte, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
Trying to be someone your not is a waste of the person you currently are.

Wow this is awesome...its so true...Keep writing

darkmist said...
on May. 2 2011 at 9:07 am
i really didn't get it but in the end its not for us to get but for you to get but i didn't understand it myself

on May. 1 2011 at 4:43 pm
RainWashed PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
46 articles 1 photo 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Repeat the good and the bad. Do it all again. And pile on the years.&quot;

Wow, you're an amazing writer! This piece, I think, everyone can relate to. This is so great! Amazing! I'm blown away. Keep writing!

on May. 1 2011 at 3:26 pm
xocierrajordan SILVER, Easley, South Carolina
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This poem is really touching..I know it touched my heart, especially after I read it several times.  I can tell it describes a type of relationship between you and God.  I really, really like this poem and I tagged it as one of my favorites.  Keep writing, you're great at it! (:

on May. 1 2011 at 11:20 am
DerClogger BRONZE, Jefferson City, Missouri
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This is not free verse.

dmell123 said...
on Apr. 30 2011 at 10:03 pm

This is awesome! it reminds me of the relationship between you and God, as well as you and your father. this may be a totally ridiculous interpretation.. haha. i'm also from staten island! what school do you go to?

 


on Apr. 29 2011 at 4:14 pm
my.freedom.lies.in.free.verse PLATINUM, Tosa, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I&#039;m in love with you, and I know that love is just a shout into a void, and that oblivion is inevitable... and I know the sun will swallow the only earth we&#039;ll ever have, and I am in love with you.&quot; Augustus Waters

i really dont understand either...

on Apr. 29 2011 at 3:11 pm
culmusybutterfly BRONZE, Lafayette, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
what ever you do in life will be insignificant. But it is very important that you do it. -Ghondi

i feel the same way. you are not alone!