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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Apr. 15 2011 at 12:38 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.<br /> -Buddha.

This poem was beautifully written, and had so much emotion and strong feelings behind it. Your writing style is very unique too. I loved how you used lower case i's instead of capitals. If you can, please check out and comment on my first poem I submitted, The Girl Inside. Thanks!

Nyla114 GOLD said...
on Apr. 15 2011 at 11:22 am
Nyla114 GOLD, Eureka Springs, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;You will make a lousy anybody else, but you are the best you in existence. You are the only one who can use your ability. It is an awesome responsibility.&rdquo;

I loved it!!!!!!

ilyib said...
on Apr. 14 2011 at 7:42 pm

i love it it was the grates poem iv read

 


on Apr. 14 2011 at 3:48 pm
WindDancer GOLD, Lexington, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;It&#039;s time to start living the life you&#039;ve imagined&quot; <br /> - Henry James<br /> <br /> &quot;I read to escape, I write to confront.&quot;

So good! And so interesting- including the title. I'm a bit confused, but I also get it, which is something I like about poems- they say what you can't say on your own, if that makes sense.

on Apr. 14 2011 at 3:32 pm
coravecwriter BRONZE, Dayton, Ohio
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This is amazing!

Range said...
on Apr. 14 2011 at 7:39 am
great!I like it.

Kunabee GOLD said...
on Apr. 13 2011 at 9:35 pm
Kunabee GOLD, Aurora, Colorado
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A lot of the time a poem is all about self interpretation.  It's hard to get an obscure not-at-all-prose poem exactly the way the author intended it.

I read it once through and understood it as the son trying and testing, and wanting to be free, but the father loved him and wanted to protect him so he didn't let him go.

If I read it again, chances are I'd see it a different way.

Also, writing down stuff is helpful.  Half of me explaining my specific interpretation came their on the spot; adding some clarity to my thoughts.


on Apr. 13 2011 at 7:08 pm
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
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Leave Merlin to their opinion and we'll leave you to your own.

on Apr. 13 2011 at 5:53 pm
I really liked it, but to tell the truth, I'm a blonde so, naturally, it took me a minute to understand the end. But it is a terriffically written poem, and it is going in my bookmarks! I'm just so sorry that iI was in such a blonde mood when i read this!!!! ;P

on Apr. 13 2011 at 4:50 pm
Yasamen_Denise BRONZE, Columbia, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
It&#039;s so hard to look up when you&#039;ve been looking down for so long.

This is a really good poem! I've shared it with some of my friends and it brought tears to their eyes

on Apr. 13 2011 at 8:30 am
Evilgummysattack GOLD, Williamsburg, Michigan
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Really amazing. I actually started to cry, I read it over and over.

spency SILVER said...
on Apr. 13 2011 at 8:18 am
spency SILVER, Irvington, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;DON&#039;T GIVE UP,REACH YOURSELF UP&quot;

nice poem.i really like it,good job,and itz very short too

floragj GOLD said...
on Apr. 13 2011 at 5:17 am
floragj GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
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This is lovely. The rhyme scheme reminds me of a rhythmic undertow.

on Apr. 12 2011 at 8:27 am
superpiggy13 SILVER, Madison, New Jersey
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I Love your poem keep writing

on Apr. 11 2011 at 9:26 am
softballfreak GOLD, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;nobody is worth your tears and the one who is wont make you cry.&quot;

This is an awesome poem!!!!! I think you should just make it a little bot more clear!!! But other than that it is FABULOUS!!!!

on Apr. 10 2011 at 10:38 am
KaitlynMarie GOLD, Northborough, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I finally understood what true love meant...love meant that you care for another person&#039;s happiness more than your own, no matter how painful the choices you face might be.&quot; <br /> -Nicholas Sparks

You can't understand a poem by reading it once or twice. Open your mind and read it again, I thought it was really good.

Keeper6 GOLD said...
on Apr. 9 2011 at 2:22 pm
Keeper6 GOLD, Buffalo, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Giving up doesn&#039;t always mean you are weak, sometimes it just means you are strong enough to let go.

I don't want to be mean or anything but i dont get it could some one please explain?

on Apr. 9 2011 at 9:35 am
RideTheWave BRONZE, South Riding, Virginia
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THIS WAS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!

on Apr. 8 2011 at 8:19 pm
inspiredbytheworld BRONZE, Rockford, Michigan
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What kind of poetry is this? The good kind.

Angie123 GOLD said...
on Apr. 8 2011 at 8:17 pm
Angie123 GOLD, Madison, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; Keep on going and don&#039;t give up&quot;

This is creative. I really like it :)