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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on May. 29 2011 at 2:28 pm
RahmaReads BRONZE, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible, if you put your mind to it ;).

This is beautiful! You really have potential.

Alicia :) said...
on May. 27 2011 at 10:53 am
Wonderful Poem !

on May. 27 2011 at 9:00 am
Rinilove32 SILVER, Boise, Idaho
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this poem is gorgeous!! i love it(:

on May. 27 2011 at 7:55 am
Bdawg325 BRONZE, Waterford, Michigan
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Set up very well.

on May. 26 2011 at 2:39 pm
Faithful365 BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
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The peom was very well versed. You did a really good job at depicting what the protection of a parent can feel like.

on May. 26 2011 at 2:08 pm
krarthurs SILVER, Plymouth, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
All generous minds have a horror of what are commonly called &quot;Facts&quot;. They are the brute beasts of the intellectual domain. <br /> -Thomas Hobbes

I loved this poem. The innocence is very apparent and the dialogue was perfect. Very good job, keep it up!

on May. 25 2011 at 3:14 pm
EyesofBlueFire GOLD, Belleville, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;We are only as strong as we are united, as weak as we are divided.&quot; Dumbledore, Harry Potter, J.K. Rowling.

I love this poem. It's deep, but leaves it so that your readers can interpret it in different ways. Very well written. :)

Lynae13 said...
on May. 24 2011 at 1:16 pm
Lynae13, Uniontown, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Be a fruit loop in a world of cheerios.

LOVE IT....'nuff said

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on May. 21 2011 at 8:02 pm
cara_ruegg, Germantown, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;live, laugh, love&quot;

Wow this is brilliant, and flowed very well.

on May. 20 2011 at 2:52 pm
Garcia_R. BRONZE, Woodburn, Oregon
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Mine will be up by Tuesday (:

on May. 20 2011 at 2:51 pm
Garcia_R. BRONZE, Woodburn, Oregon
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This is a great poem. check out mine

on May. 19 2011 at 1:39 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

same here. but i saw as "parents taking control over their children". i dont know if im right. if it is, i like it. if its not, its ok tho.

on May. 19 2011 at 1:37 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

great poem.. :)
i can relate to it and i hate it when parents think they can control us..

on May. 18 2011 at 7:30 am
Arluanna PLATINUM, Broken Arrow, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;Mwahahahahaha! Now you are mine, Lesley-Bird, finally, at last, in my... oh, drat, forgot it had wings...&rdquo;<br /> <br /> -Phil, the youngest Kalins Uzin

who cares? it's amazingly well-written, and has a lot of truth to it. If you want to get mad about stuff posted in the wrong catagory, go look at the sonnets.

And btw, free verse can technically include every type of poetry.

Great job!


on May. 15 2011 at 2:21 pm
jasmine66 BRONZE, China, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;you can do more win a war then win an earthquake&quot;

This is a great poem!! Keep it up

on May. 14 2011 at 2:09 pm
emanmkhan SILVER, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
\&quot;People will forget what you said. People will forget what you did. But people will never forget how you made them feel.\&quot; Maya Angelou

This poem is amazing. I view it so many times but it NEVER gets old.

on May. 13 2011 at 3:04 pm
pinkypromise23 PLATINUM, Cranston, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
i know that you believe you understand what you think i said, but im not sure you realize that what you heard is not what i meant.

ive comemted on this once or twice before, but i just read it again for like, the millionith time, and i got goosebumps, again. its amazing.

featherssss said...
on May. 13 2011 at 2:52 pm
this is a really interesting poem, i can relate to it because my parents were very strict and always held me back. good writing (:

on May. 13 2011 at 1:03 pm
this poem is great(:

on May. 11 2011 at 3:48 pm
missbehaven GOLD, Clinton, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
You pile up enough tomorrows, and you&#039;ll find you&#039;ve collected a lot of empty yesterdays.&hearts;

pretty awesome :)