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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Apr. 13 2010 at 2:05 pm
Karma_Chameleon SILVER, English, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
To be able to say "I love you" one must first be able to say "I" - Ayn Rand

Ouch, let me pretend for a minute that I care..............glad that's over.

on Apr. 13 2010 at 12:17 pm
Starrlyt PLATINUM, Willard, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you'll land among the stars -Les Brown

I agree with you Alexis.  People up here are really rude...it' s not nice to the author and it's not very nice to others reading these comments, either.  I am highly dissapointed in some of these people.

on Apr. 13 2010 at 11:19 am
meganleigh122 GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass... It's about learning to dance in the rain."

this was really good :) keep it up

on Apr. 12 2010 at 11:05 pm
Aubalsoskye BRONZE, Vacaville, California
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this is beauiful!!!!

on Apr. 12 2010 at 5:00 pm
margierose GOLD, New York, New York
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I LOVE THIS!! WOW! 

on Apr. 10 2010 at 10:20 pm
gabrielle pazmino BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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i was inspired when i read this

RoseRed said...
on Apr. 10 2010 at 11:40 am
that was so beautiful! i totally loved it!! ;p

on Apr. 9 2010 at 9:48 am
AlexaBeth SILVER, Stewartstown, Pennsylvania
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I loved this poem...everyone is entitled to their own opinions, but even if they didn't like this poem, or it wasn't their style...whatever the may be...it amazes me that they can't get past that and just see the fact that you are an incredible writer. I thought this was amazing, and you are very talented.  

 


on Apr. 7 2010 at 10:21 am
Quotes_on_Notebooks GOLD, Allentown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"We all die. The goal is not to live forever, the goal is to create something that will." ~Chuck Palahniuk

 This is one of the best poems I've read on here. It's really beautiful and I can relate to the subject matter. You are really, really talented!! This poem is amazing, I don't really have words to describe it. Great job

on Apr. 6 2010 at 4:52 pm
Emily.Anne BRONZE, Marblehead, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today."

this is simply AMAZING.

on Apr. 6 2010 at 8:22 am
dreamgirl01 BRONZE, NEW YORK CITY, New York
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No matter what color you are, everyone is equal and we are all human beings.

i love this poem it is so good ur good wow

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on Apr. 4 2010 at 6:33 pm
nathana, Canton, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's a b!tch, because if it were a slut, it'd be easy." - Unknown

I really love the poem's title, and I think the poem itself is quite good. However, I think if you made a couple of minor changes it could become, well, GREAT. Now, to each his own, but to my mind, the sturdy-birdie rhyme seems a bit awkward. But, still, this is a very good poem and you are a quite talented poet. Congratulations on getting published. :)

on Apr. 4 2010 at 3:48 pm
Breebear BRONZE, Lake Forest, California
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This is reallly good.  It's pretty true too.  I mean yeah our parents are trying to protect us and all but sometimes they go too far and tie us down.  You did a really good job in expressing it =]

on Apr. 4 2010 at 12:48 pm
bornforsports96 BRONZE, Sevierville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Love doesn't have a rhyme or reason, time or place, love just happens.

Absolutely beautiful! :)

on Apr. 4 2010 at 10:58 am
BrainsANDBeauty PLATINUM, Donnellson, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
I knew that guy when he was a caterpillar, you know, before he 'came out'

This poem has OBVIOUSLY been most discussed today, but you guys are all being ridiculous about it.  Breathe, and look at the poem itself, not just the words.  You can see that the author is releasing themselves.  It's rude the fact that you're bashing them when they opened themselves up and you guys are just crushing them again.  I thought this was a pretty good site, very positive, but this has disappointed me.  What is wrong with everyone? And author: This poem was beautiful.  I'm not sure if I interpreted it correctly, but I read a lot into it.

on Apr. 3 2010 at 5:52 pm
BMaaszLaxer BRONZE, Sloatsburg, New York
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"i like to lax i like to party"

yea marley get it!!!!!!!!!!

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on Apr. 3 2010 at 2:38 pm
Howler GOLD, Cerritos, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is not abut the number of breaths you take but about the moments that take your breath away"

Beautiful! Check out my forum on poetry its called the principle people

on Apr. 3 2010 at 1:10 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper<br /> <br /> Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

congrats on it getting published:D that was a real good, deep, creative poem!

on Apr. 2 2010 at 9:39 am
Jenna4Jesus BRONZE, New Brunswick, North Carolina
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Wow, this is beautiful! :)

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on Apr. 1 2010 at 9:07 am
Snook BRONZE, Lake City, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
The greatest challenge to any thinker is stating the problem in a way that will allow a solution.

Well written and great way to express thoughts on the subject. Well done =)