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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:48 am
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on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:48 am
marlone you dirty little______ im gonna punch you i your 6 foot wang

Luc Avilles said...
on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:48 am
Hey Marlone! It's me Luc, lol at history class next period, and oh, this article sucks

on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:46 am
thats word to mah red flag

on Mar. 25 2010 at 4:18 pm
xxificouldfallxx PLATINUM, Southampton, Pennsylvania
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oh my this is..eery. but good.

on Mar. 25 2010 at 12:09 pm
I thought the peom was not good at all. It was very whiny and almost seemed like he was attacking his dad.

Just Alex said...
on Mar. 25 2010 at 12:08 pm
This poem was depressing and i felt pretty bad.

on Mar. 25 2010 at 12:02 pm
Please keep your comments to yourself. Thank you.

McBillJones3 said...
on Mar. 25 2010 at 11:58 am
This poem was depressing

Mizgusie said...
on Mar. 25 2010 at 11:52 am
I like the poem. I think that you should focus on capitilization more often.

on Mar. 25 2010 at 11:49 am
I love runescape, but I love this poem more.

cegsie44 GOLD said...
on Mar. 25 2010 at 7:00 am
cegsie44 GOLD, Vienna, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
What sunshine is to flowers, smiles are to humanity. They are but trifles, to be sure, but, scattered along life&#039;s pathway, the good they do is inconceivable. <br /> -unknown

truely a magnificant poem- very different, it pulled me in :) great job!

abbey92 GOLD said...
on Mar. 24 2010 at 10:17 pm
abbey92 GOLD, Fremont, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
she smiles like she&#039;s so tough<br /> she&#039;s just someones daughter waiting for some one to love her<br /> <br /> never leave the one you love for the one you like because the one you like will leave you for the one they love

i really like this. its like they the rents tell u can be what ever you want, but only if they aprove of it.

its god i feel you

on Mar. 20 2010 at 7:13 am
claudiathewho SILVER, West Tisbury, Massachusetts
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This poem is practically exploding with emotions, and so little words to describe them. I love it.

on Mar. 19 2010 at 3:00 am
SolvoAnimus BRONZE, Jamaica, New York
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New York! REPRESENT! lol

rh423 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 19 2010 at 12:52 am
rh423 BRONZE, Brookside, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;and it&#039;s you are whatever a moon has always meant<br /> and whatever a sun will always sing is you&quot; - e.e. cummings

this was good! i feel like it would be good as lyrics

on Mar. 18 2010 at 10:52 am
BleedingRose PLATINUM, Frederic, Wisconsin
33 articles 1 photo 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
*The darkness holds infinite possibilities.<br /> <br /> (mine)

I didn't think so. You comments are supposed to be constructive, would you at least say why you didn't like this? everyone has different tastes.

on Mar. 18 2010 at 9:16 am
that was terrible

on Mar. 17 2010 at 11:04 am
Shabanana SILVER, Teaneck, New Jersey
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I really enjoyed so poem so thank you!! I wrote a poem also about people not understanding how important family and friends are and it is also very deep. Check it out i think you might like it. its called Reflections.

on Mar. 17 2010 at 11:00 am
Shabanana SILVER, Teaneck, New Jersey
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its the son not the daughter