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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Mar. 3 2010 at 5:20 pm
ladycasanova BRONZE, Salem, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
~If your lost in the dark, close your eyes~

I think that this poem is about growing up and wanting your own life and independence. I can really connect with it.

on Mar. 3 2010 at 3:09 pm
teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Nothing gold can stay" -Robert Frost

I wish I could write a piece like this, honestly I couldn't follow on what was happening but it was deep and amazing, wonderful job!

kujo96 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 3:19 pm
kujo96 BRONZE, Dothan, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
MY DEATH IS YOUR GAIN

very nice i like tht u r bound

on Mar. 2 2010 at 10:56 am
Awesome poem!

$MB609$ said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 10:49 am
$MB609$, Ocean City, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
my future will be better than my past.

yall need to get out nd go party!

KeemO12 said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 10:48 am
KeemO12, Villas, New Jersey
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im so mature!!!!

so watchu dad dosent let u party that sucks nice peom tho"lol

bmms said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 10:14 am
I think it was allright

bmmssb said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 10:09 am
i LOVE this poem it Sooooooo good i wish i could write somthing like this

bmmmsaw said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 9:30 am
nice poem i reaaly liked it

bmmscs said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:50 am
I agree. It does seem a little bit like Dr. Suess.

bmmsgk said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:34 am
its good but why does it have the part where there dad said that they will drown

BMMSAr said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:33 am
heyyyyy. iloveee thiss poem. i get that your dad is over protectiveee soo is mine so it really fits meee

bmmscs said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 7:55 am
Really good but is he drownin or what?

BMMSkf said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 7:53 am
I love this one. It makes me read it again. YOu should read it EVERYONE!

on Mar. 1 2010 at 8:49 pm
Yoshi_writes BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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so,is his father holding him back?

Cause i really don't get the ending.

on Mar. 1 2010 at 12:11 pm
foolish_dork GOLD, Green Bay, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
LOVE THAN HATE

me too.. i agree kinda got lost but it was real deep and strong

secrets said...
on Mar. 1 2010 at 10:58 am
i really like this. i think that, like many others, if we weren't bound by someone we would all be better people. this is reallt good

bmmsTA said...
on Mar. 1 2010 at 10:36 am
i dont understand it i cant tell if its about drowning or flying?

bmmsdp said...
on Mar. 1 2010 at 10:36 am
I really liked this it was deep!!!!!!

guzpacho said...
on Mar. 1 2010 at 9:04 am
guzpacho, Gary, Indiana
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nice. i understand we all could fly if we went imprisend by someone in our lives