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Daddy's Womb MAG
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.
So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.
i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.
The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.
i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.
i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.
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do you try to go to every poem just to criticize it? how about you try writing a poem
B. I found it very hard to follow, as I said before. I, being a teenage poet myself, can critique this poem to an incredible extent.
However, I did find the methaphorical meanings in this poem intriguing. I don't know if you meant to symbolize the restraints of a parent in the manner in which you did, but it was very mind-boggling to me. Maybe if you had a bit more proper-training in the aspect of how to portray what you are trying to say more easily and in an all-around more put-together manner.
Keep working on boosting your maturity, but for the time being, avoid the childish subjects, even if they might be amusing to work on at times.
personally, i like the poem a lot. im sure many kids can relate to the message, i know i can. its beautifully written :] keep up the amazing work, i'd love to read more.
.:-BeatleMania-:.
PS. If you find the time, please read my poem (in Teen Ink Raw) called Theatre of Life.