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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Jan. 1 2012 at 9:13 am
TawnyNerd1995 SILVER, Unit 15584, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Words are just emotion, cut into little pieces." -ECW

paints a wonderful picture.

vazenitran98 said...
on Dec. 28 2011 at 11:03 am
vazenitran98, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I had the blues because I had no shoes until upon the street,I met a man who had no feet."

Amazing. You are very talented.

Kim Ross said...
on Dec. 28 2011 at 9:00 am
Kim Ross, Vidor, Texas
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this is o.k. for a free verse. But I am confused on the title a mother has a womb not the father. All in all its alright.

Annoymous said...
on Dec. 26 2011 at 10:07 pm
Annoymous, Arlignton, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Respect yourself<br /> and others will respect you

that was amazing

on Dec. 26 2011 at 6:56 pm
Anthropologie BRONZE, San Francisco, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Speak softly and carry a big stick, and you will go far&quot; -Theodore Roosevelt

That was absolutely beautiful. I wish I could have your talent!

Tremendous said...
on Dec. 24 2011 at 10:06 pm
didn't see that coming. eloquently written. bravo!

on Dec. 24 2011 at 3:03 pm
AlexisTashe SILVER, Cheltenham, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;You&#039;re Not Alive Unless You&#039;re Living&quot;

Beautiful.!

on Dec. 23 2011 at 9:33 pm
trainboy PLATINUM, Washington, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The higher we go, the better we shall hear the voice of Christ.&quot; Blessed Pier Giorgio Frassati<br /> &quot;You may be what ever You resolve to be.&quot; General &quot;Stonewall&quot; Jackson

Really, your going to respond with that type of comment?!

on Dec. 22 2011 at 11:56 am
MeganRozalia BRONZE, N/a, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;shoot for the moon. even if you miss, you&#039;ll land among the stars&quot;

cant we all just get along

PrimaDonna said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 11:42 pm
I'm confused... How is this free verse?  I like the theme and the way that its written but it is rhyming and has a definite structure...

on Dec. 21 2011 at 12:42 pm
Schuyler BRONZE, Bronx, New York
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I love the theme of your poem about an overprotected father that won't let his child go or grow up . I can relate to to this poem a lot because my dad is really overprotected as well.

on Dec. 21 2011 at 12:03 pm
justin95 BRONZE, Brigdeton, New Jersey
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i like it.(:

 


on Dec. 20 2011 at 7:34 am
trainboy PLATINUM, Washington, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The higher we go, the better we shall hear the voice of Christ.&quot; Blessed Pier Giorgio Frassati<br /> &quot;You may be what ever You resolve to be.&quot; General &quot;Stonewall&quot; Jackson

Really good poem!  I like your descriptions.  Keep writing!

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 9:51 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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Great poem! So provacative... I especially like the title.

Art_Trash said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 8:49 pm
Art_Trash, Frankfort, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Say what you think and think what you want. Because the ones who mind don&#039;t matter, and the ones who matter, don&#039;t mind.&quot; ~Dr.Suess<br /> &quot;Every artist was once an amateur.&quot;

In a nutshell, an overprotective dad

CJN0808 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 11:09 am
CJN0808 BRONZE, Katy, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Experience, that most brutal of teachers; but you learn, my God do you learn.&quot;<br /> <br /> <br /> -C.S. Lewis

Great poem! Check out my page and read my poetry, if you like please comment and/ or rate. I would really appreciate it :)

on Dec. 17 2011 at 9:06 pm
rescuetruck607 GOLD, Bellmore, New York
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what a great poem keep up the good work!

ALR107 said...
on Dec. 16 2011 at 6:35 pm
ALR107, Boise, Idaho
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That is a great poem! Unique title...

on Dec. 16 2011 at 12:11 pm
yourmom08 SILVER, Vernon, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;everyone will eventually hurt you, you just have to find the right person worth suffering for&quot;

its nice but i dont get it. whats it about?

on Dec. 16 2011 at 11:24 am
Karles_Ivy PLATINUM, Sunnyside, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Sometimes the bully isn&rsquo;t the captain of the cheerleaders or the girl who for some reason has it out for only you; sometimes the worst bully of them all is you.- Karles_Ivy

Every time I read this, I fall in love with it again.! Great poem.!