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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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Aaliyahthepoet123 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 30 2011 at 9:06 am
Aaliyahthepoet123 BRONZE, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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I think this poem was wonderful :) and some people who said it wasn't good, does not know the meaning of poetry.... One word "creativity".
ihatedemapes said...
on Nov. 30 2011 at 5:12 am
all them people that said this was good, are LIARS, just praying you read what they call "poetry" Or "Art" if you will, but lets be serious, this sucks.. and for all who did not know, men dont have a womb, change the title noob.
ReversePrint BRONZE said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 6:44 pm
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This is an amazing poem :) good job!
Jeast10 GOLD said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 4:47 pm
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it doesnt matter how many times i read this, i get goosebumps every time! check out my work plz((((((::::
dakotawright SILVER said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 11:01 am
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Very Metaphoric.
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Every time I read this, it fills me with an emotion I can't name. This is FANTASTIC!...I would love it if you could get the chance sometime to check out some of my work. Thank you :)
Meredith15 said...
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nicely written!
Ella1 GOLD said...
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Absolutely amazing poem, I love it. Would you mind reading some of my work if you get a chance? I would love to hear what you think!
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swifthearth, I would like to thank you, for your nice comment, and support. :)
AlyBUdawgs BRONZE said...
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I liked it a lot it tells a story in a beautiful inavative way (:
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I sometimes ask myself the sameted of like us  question, but the fact is that these people all started off like us-Unnoticed.- They had to work there way to this level.

Ps. I also enjoy your work.

swiftheart GOLD said...
on Nov. 22 2011 at 12:05 pm
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I loved it! You incoperated so much into one poem making it all the more powerful. Creative title, nice wording and an inspiring meaning. 

I would be honored if you looked at some of my poems.

Kimmie_Kat SILVER said...
on Nov. 21 2011 at 8:57 am
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First of all, Ginger I really appreciate what you said and how you put your comment in a nice way. Second of all, leyna in my POV i was just wondering how this writer got so popular because i really enjoy writing and i wanted to know how to get my writing knowed. Also, you can't judge my writing if you haven't read it.
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I love such poetry!It just reminds me of so many things!Great job!

 

artmantist BRONZE said...
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hello, nice poem. Would u guys wanna check out my work. its called the cottage 

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KristinHopkins8 SILVER said...
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creative title!
BridgetND BRONZE said...
on Nov. 19 2011 at 9:42 am
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this was wonderful!! =] i was wondering if anyone could view my work and tell me what they think? it would mean alot to me
Ginger_ninja72521 SILVER said...
on Nov. 18 2011 at 9:04 pm
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I think this is amazingly deep. I love all of your metaphors! The simplness of your wording brought so much meaning! I can't wait to see more!
Ginger_ninja72521 SILVER said...
on Nov. 18 2011 at 9:02 pm
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It shouldn't matter if your stuff is discussed most or the most popular, just that it makes you happy to know that it's out there or that you can write at all. :) And we should support such amazing writers such as this one and learn from them to better our own skills!
Leyna1997 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 18 2011 at 12:01 pm
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No disrespect, but maybe if you put a little more effort into writing your poetry and getting noticed instead of putting time into bragging and whinning, we would all be looking and commenting on your poem instead.