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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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on Nov. 17 2011 at 4:27 pm
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Have you written poetry pefore? You are my inspiration.
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on Nov. 16 2011 at 11:26 am
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This was amazing!!!!!!!!! How do you find the inspiration to create such a magnificent piece, or any piece in general?
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I had to read this like five times before I could comprehend it :) The message is really good, definitely one of those that makes you think!
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HAVE YOU GUYS EVER WONDERED HOW THESE POEMS GOT SOOOOOO POPULAR? HOE IS IT SO POPULAR? I WRITE GOOD POEMS TOO!
Adam said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 9:16 am
This was a pretty cool and confusing story. My best friend drowned in a pond so it was a little sad that he say you will drown...
SassysGirl said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 8:56 am
 I think this poem is really good as it uses a lot of description and good detail. why didnt the sons father let him him, but he let him fly?
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bubbles.. said...
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one of my teachers always say its better to keep them wanting more. :)
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makes you wonder

 

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