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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Aug. 8 2011 at 6:43 am
sarah.xx BRONZE, Sydney, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
No one can make you feel inferior without your consent- Eleanor Roosevelt

I love the depth in this poem and the hidden meaning. Truly remarkable.

on Aug. 7 2011 at 2:19 pm
TheWickedOne GOLD, Newton, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
I'm tired of trying, sick of crying, I know I've been smiling, but inside I'm dying.

beautiful! it stands out from others and shows creativity!

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on Aug. 1 2011 at 9:01 pm
AliLinnS GOLD, Heislerville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I love you, sweet Kate. And I&#039;m truly sorry about this. I do feel...everything.&quot; -Casanova<br /> Kiss The Girls by James Patterson

Amazing, Honey! Great job!

on Aug. 1 2011 at 8:46 am
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Great! Can you guys read and comment on mine?? Please I will read yours if you read mine!

on Jul. 31 2011 at 4:01 pm
-hannah- SILVER, --, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The books that help you most are those which make you think that most. The hardest way of learning is that of easy reading; but a great book that comes from a great thinker is a ship of thought, deep freighted with truth and beauty.&quot;

really good poem :D keep writing more becaue this one is amazing :)

on Jul. 27 2011 at 5:29 pm
KayleeRae PLATINUM, Arvada, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Either write something worth doing or do something worth writing.&quot;

I love this, it has very nice rhythm :D

on Jul. 25 2011 at 5:30 pm
hollygolightly109 SILVER, Seattle, Washington
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The imagery, strong. The meaning people find in water, sand, stone, and flying is something that you're using so simply! It connects on such a basic level. 

Your piece inspired me to put more of these universal images and meanings in my work... make people connect!

Thanks.


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on Jul. 25 2011 at 12:15 am
jenna-e, Fremont, California
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Very nice.

poet.lover said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 7:12 pm
wow that's amazing! i can relate to an extent and the emotion is so strong

on Jul. 21 2011 at 4:13 pm
Ashley Mason BRONZE, Sturbridge, Massachusetts
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anyone who appreciated this should also read my poem Briar Rose

on Jul. 21 2011 at 12:57 am
SoCalBarbie SILVER, Riverside, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;whoever said the sky is the limit was incorrect, because I saw footprints on the moon.&quot;

i absolutely adored it, and can completely relate. check out  some of my work 2 and gimme your feedback.

on Jul. 20 2011 at 9:59 pm
NathanBHooker GOLD, Wentzville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Those that care don&#039;t matter; and, those that matter don&#039;t care.&quot;

I enjoyed your peice, keep it up. Look at my work?

on Jul. 19 2011 at 9:24 pm
fortetennis SILVER, Santa Barbara, California
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Beautiful. Simply beautiful. I am sorry about your relationship with your father. I strongly urge you to stand up to him. 

on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:45 pm
vzimmerman PLATINUM, Ontario, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Happiness is the key to success, if you love what your doing you will be successful.&quot;

Wonderful images! Great emotions and you put words together so smoothly it's a great gift. :) Keep writing. And if possible can you check out some of my pieces? 

TAR11 SILVER said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 5:34 pm
TAR11 SILVER, Allison Park, Pennsylvania
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Cool poem.  Please check out mine if you get the chance.  From the Hilltop and Anonymous' Inferno. 

Mazzer BRONZE said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 4:03 pm
Mazzer BRONZE, Bonne Terre, Missouri
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I feel your pain.

on Jul. 14 2011 at 12:48 pm
Tongue_Blep PLATINUM, ????, Ohio
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I loved it. It was a very moving poem. I just wrote two stories called nightstalker and the beast. If any of u read them make sure u post comments saying if u liked them or not or if i should change anything. I enjoy listening to feed back and tips about writing better. Thanks!  :D

on Jul. 11 2011 at 3:08 am
BrokenThorn BRONZE, Blenheim, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;You&#039;ve lived your life Like a candle in the wind. Not knowing who to cling to when the rain set in&quot;<br /> - Sir Elton John

Its just criticisim, they're just voicing they're opinion. Could have done it more polietly however

Solei BRONZE said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 7:02 pm
Solei BRONZE, Sandia, TX, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Live Fast, Die Young, Leave a pretty corpse

I like how this poem reaches out to you when you read it :)

Also no intention to be rude but check out my poems, The Truth Behind the Tears or Imagination by Solei:) Loved it


on Jul. 7 2011 at 3:16 pm
claudiathewho SILVER, West Tisbury, Massachusetts
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It's a stylistic thing that he didn't capitalize "i". Check out E.E. Cummings' work.