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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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Brandon Sipp said...
on Nov. 11 2010 at 8:13 am
Brandon Sipp, Cleveland Heights, Ohio
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i THINK THAT SOMETIMES PARENTS GIVE TOO MUCH FREEDOM

Ms.Tanitra said...
on Nov. 11 2010 at 8:08 am
Ms.Tanitra, Cleveland, Ohio
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Sometimes parents don't have as much faith in their kids like they should. We got to believe in ourself sometimes.

on Nov. 10 2010 at 8:17 pm
Juan Arango GOLD, Wellington, Florida
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Most Parents don't realize that to much controll is bad for a child< this poem shows it

 


nygrl126 said...
on Nov. 10 2010 at 7:52 pm

If you think its not cool to write poetry then why are you commenting???

By the way really good poem I didn't get it at first either but I do now!!!


on Nov. 10 2010 at 9:09 am
WriterFighter PLATINUM, Wilsonville, Other
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Favorite Quote:
*Women and men are very different, but not when it comes down to their heart

This poem resembles a childs imagination being destroyed by a controlling parent.

MotesRacin said...
on Nov. 9 2010 at 7:34 pm
MotesRacin, Moulton, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
Your faker than Monopoly Money Man (: &lt;3 !

I truley lovee thiss it is exspresionable ! <3

AsianSausage said...
on Nov. 9 2010 at 8:41 am
Wat is wrong with u guys sittin and doin poetry..u r not cool :(

on Nov. 7 2010 at 5:12 pm
shoelessjoe GOLD, Highland, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t tell me the sky&#039;s the limit when ther are footsteps on the moon&quot;<br /> &quot;Instead of waiting for the storm to pass, learn to dance in the rain&quot;<br /> &quot;The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams&quot;

I really like it how your father tells you to go try knowing that you'll fail and when you try to fly he pulls on the chain and your bound. it's kinda sad in a way but relates well to many things. keep writing.

on Nov. 7 2010 at 3:13 pm
WintersRevenge PLATINUM, Ponte Vedra Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Yay! I love being purple!&quot; ~Patrick Star, Spongebob Squarepants

I loved this. It is simplistic, yet somehow complex at the same time. It's a real talent, the ability to twist words into emotions, and you have it. This is a true work of art. Pursue writing. You obviously have a passion for it.

on Nov. 6 2010 at 9:06 pm
Running_in_the_Rain BRONZE, Montrose, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
See my work!! <br /> http://www.teenink.com/search.php?smodel=all&amp;sall_uid=109226

This is good

Rileah BRONZE said...
on Nov. 6 2010 at 5:46 pm
Rileah BRONZE, Christina Lake, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not counted by the number of breaths you take but by the number of moments that take your breath away. &lt;3

Wow! I really liked the ending. Keep it up, you've got talent.

yomaamaa, said...
on Nov. 5 2010 at 9:14 am
very very nice piece of work, its like layed out and rhymes the way a young person would write it, but very ncie choice of words, (llikkee)

Ninalaw SILVER said...
on Nov. 3 2010 at 11:11 pm
Ninalaw SILVER, Tucson, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;We delight in the beauty of the butterfly, but rarely admit the changes it has gone through to achieve that beauty.&rdquo;~Maya Angelou

wow! parents just need to learn to let go and take thier chances. sometimes the impossible is what makes life worth living because dreams is what keeps us going. I love the way you written this poem! it really hits home. you should read my poem "Against my mother's heart" it's a different view of parenthood. I'm just getting started and i would love your feedback.

on Nov. 3 2010 at 6:12 pm
wind.and.rain.again BRONZE, Amherst, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;What is it you wish to do with your one wild and precious life?&quot; Mary Oliver

i agree too but i think that sometimes the best poems are complecated and hard to understand. so thanks for writing

Jager BRONZE said...
on Nov. 3 2010 at 1:49 pm
Jager BRONZE, Kaleva, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
keep your friends close but ur enemies closer

very nice piece of work liked it :)

on Nov. 3 2010 at 7:30 am
D_Beauty BRONZE, Euclid, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;God didn&#039;t promise days without pain, laughter without sorrow, sun without rain, but He did promise strength for the day, comfort for the tears, and light for the way.&quot;

Wow, I really enjoyed reading this poem. It made me think about what always been holding me back. Keep writing! 

on Nov. 2 2010 at 2:42 pm
Nothin.U.Seen.B4, Sacramento,California, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;peace be &#039;steel&#039; and around me we keeps the peace because i always keeps me a peace of steel, load yo steel thank you jesus&quot;

I loved this, its something everyone can relate to. Theres a point in everyones lives where we feel like were chained like we cant do something because someones stopping us.

cool said...
on Nov. 1 2010 at 6:40 pm
good job-- are u afraid to swim???

on Nov. 1 2010 at 8:49 am
it was very touching

on Oct. 29 2010 at 2:11 pm
Wicked_Angel BRONZE, Mahrashtra, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&#039;&#039;what do i do when i see someone extremely gorgeous...?<br /> i stare i smile ...and when i get tired i put the mirror down!&quot;

i love the way you've concluded the poem...its really a great reflection of the kind of lives we live today