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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Oct. 27 2010 at 4:44 pm
Terrahantu BRONZE, Gillette, New Jersey
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that was beautiful. i can completly relate to it. i feel as though my father wont let me be free and that im bound to the lifestyle he wants for me. and everytime i try to do something he's there to make it so i feel as though its impossible. this was very well written and i hope that chain is soon broken.

on Oct. 25 2010 at 9:08 pm
WordforWord SILVER, Royal Oak, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Don't Just Exist, Live

admit-ably I'm jealous... Is that bad? I hope that's a compliment 

on Oct. 25 2010 at 8:20 pm
See, if this were Facebook I would 'Become a Fan," Or "Like" this:)

on Oct. 24 2010 at 9:50 pm
TheRaven BRONZE, Miami, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"A prisoner of war is a man who tries to kill you, fails, and then asks you not to kill him." - Winston Churchill

Never have I seen such wonderful depiction of being completely bound, unfree. 

on Oct. 24 2010 at 8:01 pm
MeaganNicole PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
Those who wish to sing always find a song.

This is absolutely beautiful! I love the way you ended it.

on Oct. 24 2010 at 1:59 pm
beckmann95 BRONZE, Cross River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;if you&#039;re not afraid, if you take everything you are, everything worthwhile in you and direct it at one goal, one ultimate mark, you&#039;ve got to get there.&quot;<br /> -James Dean

Your expression on lack of freedom is beautifully put.

on Oct. 24 2010 at 1:41 pm
Shabanana SILVER, Teaneck, New Jersey
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wow! this is really great! can u please check out some of my poems. thanks

on Oct. 22 2010 at 3:25 pm
StephenieReneeBaker SILVER, Colorado, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Don&#039;t promise my forever when your just going to break my heart.

I have read this like seven time and still cant get over how good it is

on Oct. 21 2010 at 12:55 pm
VannahJo BRONZE, Inez, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;o captain my captain&quot;

This is a fantastic poem! 

I love it!!1


on Oct. 20 2010 at 2:35 pm
TimmothyMark GOLD, Hertford, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I can do all things through Christ who stregthens me.&quot; - Phillipians 4:13

There is an ancient Roman account of a father's love for his son. A Roman Emperor, whose name I don't know, held his son in his arms and declared that he would be as glorious as his father. Then silently said to himself: "No, he shall be greater than his father."

on Oct. 20 2010 at 10:54 am
Katelyn Woosley, West Plains, Missouri
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this poem is sooo buitiful

on Oct. 20 2010 at 9:32 am
12MELODY BRONZE, Columbus, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
love is the key to everything

i love this poem and it has a lot of emotions in it

on Oct. 19 2010 at 8:44 pm
WinterFairy PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
45 articles 15 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t dream it. Be it.&quot;<br /> &quot;Singing is praying twice, and dancing is singing with the body.&quot;<br /> &quot;Paper is more patient than man.&quot;<br /> &quot;Where you live shouldn&#039;t determine whether you live&quot;

Wow. I can relate at times. Parents sometimes just go a bit too far, right?

on Oct. 19 2010 at 7:43 pm
dontwrrybehappy BRONZE, Seekonk, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;I make it a rule never to smoke while I&#039;m sleeping.&rdquo;- Mark Twain

I love the emotion behind this poem and I'd like to check out more of your stuff.  If anyone would like to check out my new poem "Scared to Move" I'd greatly appreciate it.  Read it, rate it, comment...let me know what you think. Thanks.

on Oct. 16 2010 at 2:00 pm
Pitiful_Anonymous PLATINUM, New Cumberland, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;and all you f***ers go beep beep beep in cheap,plastic cars. If It&#039;s to dumb to see or say you&#039;ll still sing it, and I&#039;ll just cue the applause&quot; - Marilyn Manson

this is very great! :D

Youvee got serious talent :)


on Oct. 16 2010 at 1:52 pm
Afroboriqua BRONZE, LaGrange, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
All the stars in the sky can make the world beautiful for a split second, beauty only remains in the purest forms.

Let me just say this poem was estoudning! it came from the heart. you can tell just by reading it that there is an underlying connection and emotion which overtook you when you wrote this. let me just say , this is how a writer should write.

on Oct. 15 2010 at 5:44 pm
LunaWingsFlyAway GOLD, Farmingdale, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;And neither the angels in heaven above,Nor the demons down under the sea,Can ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee<br /> ...Of my darling-my darling-my life and my bride.In the sepulchre there by the sea.&quot;<br /> <br /> -Edgar Allen Poe

this is ann amazing poem...it captured an emotion but the metaphor and everyting is great...its one of  my favs :)...take a look on some of my stuff pleasee.

 


on Oct. 14 2010 at 3:43 pm
Becauseifeellikeit PLATINUM, Potomac, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
Don&#039;t guess. Know.

This poem is a classic and I love it...it's original and yet hints at inspiration from other author's works. Read some of mine?

on Oct. 13 2010 at 5:27 pm
julyox20 SILVER, Huntley, Illinois
8 articles 4 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Faith consists in believing when it is beyond the power of reason to believe. &quot;

the first part was kind of confusing. But the second part completely makes sense.

on Oct. 13 2010 at 2:12 pm
iAmTheStardust PLATINUM, Moon Twp., Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The prettiest flowers grow in the biggest pile of manure.&quot;

i also agree. great words, i like the detail, i'm just not sure what you're getting at, it doesn't make much sense to me. it's not the first time i've read this poem actually, i keep coming back to it. some how it just keeps calling to me "Come back, maybe i'll make more sense to you". it just never really does... you're good at writing i'm just confused.