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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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-Mz.S- SILVER said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 1:18 pm
-Mz.S- SILVER, Quincy, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
two fingers up & i'm out! ;)

No, the poem is amazing.

I wonder why they stopped posting your comments.


-Mz.S- SILVER said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 1:16 pm
-Mz.S- SILVER, Quincy, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
two fingers up & i'm out! ;)

Yeah. Duh.

on Jun. 9 2010 at 10:30 am
fireeyedgirl SILVER, Dulles, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I think that most of us, anyway, read these stories that we know are not &quot;true&quot; because we&#039;re hungry for another kind of truth: the mythic truth about human nature in general, the particular truth about those life-communities that define our own identity, and the most specific truth of all: our own self-story. Fiction, because it is not about someone who lived in the real world, always has the possibility of being about oneself. &quot;<br /> &mdash; Orson Scott Card

I think that would be a metaphorical chain to keep him from flying.

jjhaha!luvu said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 10:27 am
Hummmm....... i did! idk whats up cuz i did post the link! lomg can we say gay?

Katie_me said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 9:04 am
...Ok I don't get it, when you said your dad pulled on a chain and you were bound... does that mean your father had you on a chain??? If so that is so so wrong.

on Jun. 9 2010 at 8:36 am
seriously,  that last comment made no sense. you need to reread that statement and change a few things. thank you.

on Jun. 9 2010 at 8:33 am

Believe it or not, there is actually a few more lines in the poem. So...........................................................................................................................................................................................

if you get rid of that line, i don't think it will be the death of the poem.

 

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on Jun. 9 2010 at 8:28 am
aye yo grrrrrl. WADDUP.

on Jun. 9 2010 at 8:25 am
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on Jun. 8 2010 at 7:39 pm
DaiJanai2013 BRONZE, San Bernardino, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;When you meet a new person the first thing they know about is your name &hellip;. and the first thing they&rsquo;ll remember about you is how you carried it&quot;- Dai janai Yarber

That wasss a greatt poem !!!!

kms777 GOLD said...
on Jun. 8 2010 at 5:12 pm
kms777 GOLD, Winn, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;learn from your mistakes but regret not a thing&quot;

yea i thout it was awesome. ur a really great poet. i gave you five stars. i hope youll rate some of mine too, so i can get better.

on Jun. 7 2010 at 11:24 pm
Bonianlethalxx2 SILVER, Concord, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Hard work defeats talent when talent fails to work hard&quot; Rene Maher (unknown original)

Really great poem, i liked that you used rhyme but not to to much. Great balance. All around really good job.

on Jun. 7 2010 at 5:37 pm
RobertoO PLATINUM, Barrington Hills, Illinois
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Reading this poem was enjoyable, it has made my late afternoon/early evening.

on Jun. 6 2010 at 5:55 pm
Karma_Chameleon SILVER, English, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
To be able to say &quot;I love you&quot; one must first be able to say &quot;I&quot; - Ayn Rand

Wow, good job providing constructive feedback. :-/

on Jun. 6 2010 at 5:49 pm
Brianagg SILVER, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;It is better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all&quot;

this poem is amazing ! it has alot of emotion and passion embedded into the words.

on Jun. 6 2010 at 1:23 am
This poem is so touching. I really enjoyed this poem. It reminded me of how life can hold you down.

on Jun. 4 2010 at 12:02 am
bEaUt3yWiThIn BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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i reallly enjoyed reading this! its really great

on Jun. 3 2010 at 3:20 pm
HitTheSkyline BRONZE, Tool, Texas
2 articles 2 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sometimes you put walls up not to keep people out, but see who cares enough to break the down.

Maybe the poet doesn't she life the way the poem reads. They may have wrote this poem to show how life and, Lord help, parents hold us back.

on Jun. 2 2010 at 8:57 pm
BornPoet1996 GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
My favorite quote I always say is:How does one find happiness in making another lose their own and Love comes and goes like a revolving door waiting to hit you dead in the head and knock you on your little feet...

That is a really great masterpiece. Better that mine but yeah.

on Jun. 2 2010 at 3:28 pm
AnnieManhattan GOLD, New York, New York
15 articles 6 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Sometimes, if you stand on the bottom rail of a bridge and lean over to watch the river slipping slowly away beneath you, you will suddenly know everything there is to be known.&quot; <br /> &mdash; A.A. Milne

thats great! i really love the style- keep writing!