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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Aug. 11 2010 at 6:45 am
cmiley_freaky SILVER, Mississauga, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Go for it now, the future is promised to no one." - Wayne Dyer.

this was AMAZING, i've never read ANYthing like this before! well done!

on Aug. 10 2010 at 7:19 pm
brown.sugar BRONZE, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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i lovin it

this was very good. i mean  like everyone has a time in there life where they gotta test there parents desicion. can you check out my work

Photo_97 said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 1:40 pm
Photo_97, Ct., Connecticut
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that was sooooo good :) we all have had moments like that and i love that you dont hide from what your feeling. i can tell that you will reach much greater hights! keep it up. and dont be afraid to go alittle bit more off the ground than anyone else ;)

on Aug. 10 2010 at 3:50 am
DayDreamer47 BRONZE, Charlotte, North Carolina
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On the whole I was very impressed by this poem. I really think you have a gift, but for your next piece I would try and push the envelope more. You're trying to get out of your comfort zone as I can see by try a little harder and you should be happily surprised :)

on Aug. 8 2010 at 6:18 pm
WaterWatcher SILVER, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Good things don't just happen to those that wait but to those that do.

u truely depict how a father tries to keep u chained wen u wanna be free ur truely a great poet

on Aug. 8 2010 at 2:12 am
jmccasanova88 SILVER, Cheshire, Connecticut
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"Why do people say the sky is the limit when theres foot prints on the moon" “Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. It is our light, not our darkness that most frightens us. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? You are a child of God. Your playing small does not serve the world. There is nothing enlightened about shrinking so that other people won't feel insecure around you. We are all meant to shine, as children do. We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same. As we are liberated from our own fear, our presence automatically liberates others.”

very strong and very true...great work much repect

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on Aug. 5 2010 at 8:06 pm
Lynne03 SILVER, Greeley, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"When you feel like giving up, remember why you held on for so long in the first place." -Someone

This is one of my all time favorite poems that I've seen on this site, and all around.
Truly beautiful work.

on Aug. 2 2010 at 7:56 pm
fadingaway1324 SILVER, Latrobe, Pennsylvania
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Thats what happens when you are told one thing but kept from it by another. The little white lies that you beleive and then grow up and realize that freedom was only implied by those around you and never really put into action 

Mr.Mills said...
on Aug. 2 2010 at 8:27 am
Ok this is a great article it shows that the farther tells the boy he can do what ever he  wanted if he dreams big enough and that to me is a great dad.

on Aug. 1 2010 at 8:40 pm
CynthiaLynnILY PLATINUM, Moore, Oklahoma
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Amazing.

bloodlove said...
on Aug. 1 2010 at 4:48 pm
there are simp;y no words to describe what it means to me...

on Jul. 30 2010 at 10:57 pm
chocolatkiss1013 SILVER, New York, New York
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But paradise is locked and bolted, we must make a journey around the world to see if a backdoor has perhaps been left open

 love this poem it describes perfectly how teens are bound and limited by their parents

Bob6969 said...
on Jul. 30 2010 at 4:53 pm
Bob6969, East Bumfuck, Other
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Jay and silent bob rock.

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on Jul. 29 2010 at 11:38 am
toni12 BRONZE, Burleson, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometime's were so obvilious to the greeness of our own grass an always want what we think the greener grass is"

thats really good(:

on Jul. 29 2010 at 9:06 am
Nora.Whatever BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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this is great.

Daddy's womb-- is the chain kind of like an umbilical cord to which you are bound, in a figurative sense?


on Jul. 27 2010 at 9:18 pm
PoetryGoddess10 BRONZE, Lithonia, Georgia
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This was very good. Hey you guys should come read my poetry too!!!!

on Jul. 27 2010 at 11:25 am
Spazzmine BRONZE, Foley, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"Some of the greater things in life are unseen thats why you close your eyes when you kiss, cry, or dream... "Anonymous.

Wow,this was simply amazing.

I loved it :]]


Bbb4313 GOLD said...
on Jul. 26 2010 at 10:06 pm
Bbb4313 GOLD, Gwinn, Michigan
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"Creative minds never get bored." Unknown

Oh, i love this. I love the title, too. But i swear i have read this somwhere... do you post elswhere?

on Jul. 24 2010 at 11:25 pm
beautiful_but_torn GOLD, West Jefferson, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
It&#039;s all make believe, isn&#039;t it? <br /> Marilyn Monroe

umm...

whats "a daddy's womb?"

Dont you come from a mothers womb?

Anywayss.....

 


on Jul. 23 2010 at 12:54 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

 how does this have anything to do with a daddys womb?